A promise Unbroken

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A promise unbroken

I love the words coming out of your mouth
I love how you make them dance
I watch them slowly make their way
into my heart without a chance.

I love how you say them so sweet
I love to watch your lips move with every letter
" Life isn't worth the trouble, love.
Come with me & I'll take you to everything better. "

I love how you take my hand in yours
I love how you hold mine so strong
We run together at the speed of light
But we always slow down to hear the ocean song.

I love how you take my breath away
I love how you steal the words off my tongue
You put your finger upon my lip
And I know there's hope for a rose that's young.

"Never waste your words on moments that were made for silence, love."
Then you looked into my eyes & I did the same
Wondering why you loved words so much
When you rarely take them for your claim.

Words are tricky..
Words are powerful you said.
They can make you rule the world.
They can keep you alive or dead.

They can make you fall in love,
They can force you to unleash your desires.
They can take you above the clouds.
They can kill you when coming from the heart of liars.

Breaking a promise is never easy
Breaking a promise is never great.
We fall down beneath the bits of glass.
Then we stand up to blame it on fate.




Hope you truly liked this. Any criticism is more than welcome! :)
I hope life isn't a joke, because I don't get it.




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They can make you fall in love,
They can force you to unleash your desires.
They can take you above the clouds.
They can kill you when coming from the heart of liars.


Especially if their from a deceitful snake. They don't know the damage they can do, so that's why so many people are so guarded, why I am so guarded, if your hurt alot it either molds you into someone stronger or someone weaker hence the person that guards them self. I really liked this maybe I only relate to the negative but the positive is magical.

Tidal waves they rip right through me
Tears from eyes worn cold and sad
Pick me up now, I need you so bad
Down down down down




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I really like the imagery you use in this poem. It was all very strong and really held the poem together. There is only one thing I would recommend thinking about changing.

I love how you say them so sweet
I love to watch your lips move with every letter
" Life isn't worth the trouble, love.
Come with me & I'll take you to everything better. "


I think for the first line, change sweet to sweetly. It flows nicely and adds an extra syllable which matches the rest of the lines in the stanza better.

Other than that, i really liked your poem.

Keep writing!
arspoetica
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