Another Beautiful Morning.

Another beautiful morning,
another busy day.
Where the suns just shines,
And we walk our way.

Another beautiful morning,
where we wave our worries goodbye.
And we paint on fake smiles,
and hope Hell goes away.

Another beautiful morning,
where we pretend the world's fine.
Dust our problems under the rug,
And say, "Everything's okay!"

Another beautiful morning,
where we live another lie.
Until the ugly truth's discovered,
Let's live with a smile.

Love the poem because it's better than mine as all poems are! So saying that, I can't really help you improve. Just here to tell you that you should keep writing awesome stuff. So ummmm... Happy writing!

~GMAmuffin~


and I LOVE your avvie! <3

I like this poem. I thought when beginning to read this it was going to be a poem about the morning. Maybe a beautiful sunset or something without a strong message, but it is nice to know this is different. I don't have much to correct you on, your a wonderful writer so I'll just say my favourite verse:

Justtrying wrote:Another beautiful morning,
where we live another lie.
Until the ugly truth's discovered,
Let's live with a smile.

I like how its sums up the whole message of the poem, simplifying it a lot, in case people didn't really get it. Nothing to criticize you on, so great job!

Deanie x

Hey love!
Just stumbled upon your poem while I was, "ahem" stalking you.
Its really good, you are getting better everyday! This poem reminded me of Adam Lambert's Mad World.

Just noticed a grammatical error though,

Another beautiful morning,
another busy day.
Where the suns just shines,
And we walk our way.

It should be "sun just shines".

But keep it up sis! I'm really proud of you!