It's been a while since;

It's been a while since;
You've spoken to me with your own voice,
Even if the words are crule.

It's been a while since;
You've touched me with your own skin,
Even if it was an accident.

It's been a while since;
You've listened to mee with open ears,
Even if my words don't reach you.

It's been a while since;
I broke your heart,
Even if you broke mine long before.

Hi there!

This is a really great poem, I love it! You put a lot of emotion into this and that really made it stand out. I like the way you repeated the phrase 'it's been a while since'. It adds to the rhythm of the poem and it leaves the reader with something to remember. Your imagery is great and the poem flows well too. I honestly couldn't find anything that I would change about this.

Overall it's a great poem. Keep writing!

Hey! This poem was good!

It had good rhythm, good flow, and it shows feeling clearly, a little too clearly though. Try not to be so raw with your words, and leave a little room for interpretation. You can do this with adding more imagery, metaphor and bringing out inner thoughts with a little more narration and complexity, the complexity of which the situation clearly has. There were also a few gramatical errors, though I am sure they are just typos.

Anyways, these are just suggestions which you don't have to act upon. I really enjoyed the idea of this, and it's very good. It just needs a little tweeking, a little detail. Keep this in mind if you decide to edit. I hope I helped! Keep writing. ♥

So I really liked this, but there's a few quick things I'm gonna fix for you Comments in blue edits are in red.

It's been a while since;
You've spoken to me with your own voice,
Even though your words were cruel. I took out if and replaced it with "though" because it's past tense.

It's been a while since;
You've touched me with your own skin,
Even if you would on accident. Fixed it again so then it's past tense instead of present.

It's been a while since;
You've listened to me with open ears,
Even if my words didn't reach you. Fixed it so then it's past tense, but I really loved this stanza.

It's been a while since;
I broke your heart,
But you broke mine long before.

I changed the beginning of this line to "but" because you've already used the word "even" three times.

Overall I really enjoyed this poem it flowed well and all the edits I made to me made the poem flow even better but it's your poem so you get to decide how it's written xD I liked how short this poem was but how strong the message was that you gave us. It was written simple but you are able to look at it in a complex way if you want. Normally love poems to me don't seem that appealing but I loved this! Great job!
Peace,
Snickerdooly

I liked this because I could really relate to it. Infact, it was scary how much I could relate to it. I love poems with emotion and this poem has alot of emotion and its one of the best I've read in a while. It made me smile. There was one little spelling mistake however
[quotcrule][/quote] is actually spelled cruel but apart from that no other errors apart from some of the word choice ypu repeated alot. Expand word choice.