Animal life 90210 part 3

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Ok so on the last episode we left off with Greg the fruity Gopher knocking on the door..here is what happens next:

*Character description: Greg..fruity..talks like a pot head..Bentley: whiny..typical male bird..home issues...Benny..Same personality of Benny Lopez from the show George Lopez*

Greg: Can i come in?

*Bentley then lets Greg into his home and they walk back to Bentley's room*

Greg: Dude no homo but your dad looks kinda cute today..

Bentley: First off ew..second that was my mom..

Greg: Ohhhh...ok i forgot your dad is Mr. Garrison man

Bentley: Um no its not..if our old teacher was my dad id just blow my brains out..

Greg: Ok if hes not then prove it bro

Bentley: Um...i cant..sadly...i have no idea who he is

Greg: You should Google him bro..i heard Google knows everything man..

Bentley:..you smoke too much you cant just type in find my dad and a map will come up with him right there..thats retarded

Greg: Whatever dude..lets go play some games or something im bored

*they start playing some games and Greg starts being fruity*

Greg: ok man so like what if i told you i was gay..totally pretending here..what would you say?

Bentley: umm..idk id just make sure you wouldnt like touch me

Greg: ok cool well im not gay man..btw your tail feather is pretty sexy..No Homo though dude

Bentley: what? you cant just be uber gay and call no homo..havent you seen the video no homo goes too far? learn from it you fag (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RUCbPvP5H9k go to watch what he means )

*Greg just shuts up and they continue to play Call of Duty: Black ops ( i credit this part of the bit to Treyarch gaming company to avoid being sued..) and Bentley gets crushed by Greg*

Bentley: OMG YOU CHEATER!

Greg: calm down man its just a game look ill kiss you and make it better..no homo..

Bentley:NO! your gay..

Greg: No im not man im just trying to you know show you some love man calm down

Bentley:?? you know what forget it lets just play again

*They play another round and Bentley wins this time and he celerbrates*

Bentley: WOOHOO!! in your face you faggot Gopher!!

Greg:dude chill with the insults man..good job bro

*Greg slaps Bentley on the butt and then continues on*

Greg: Good game bro..you've got nice buns btw no homo..

Bentley: dude you dont slap someones butt and then say its not gay when its super gay..you need to watch that video ( again the link is (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RUCbPvP5H9k to see what he means)

Greg: Whatever man your just mad cause im in touch with my feminine side and yours is all out of whack man

Bentley: No its not..you dont know what your talking about

Greg:oh i dont? then how come one girl craps on you and you go all violent on them man you gotta keep peace man..its the way of surviving in harmony these days bro

Bentley: Look she provoked me..she got what she deserved!

Greg:Whatever dude i just think you were out of line

Bentley: look i dont need this from a fag like you* says jokingly*

Greg: Look whos talking your mom told me what you did to Silvia..you did her the way true gays do..hahaha * he also says jokingly but Bentley takes it personal*

Bentley: OH HECK NAW!!! IM TAKING YOU DOWN TOO GAYFER!!!

*Bentley then chases Greg out of the under ground home and up through the door leading to the surface so he can fly after him*

Bentley: IVE GOT YOU NOW HAHA!

Greg: comon man i was just play chill bro!

*Bentley does not chill and continues to chase him..but his dumb self forgot he was on house arrest*

Bentley: Oh crap...* He is then sent it to a series of electric shocks until he enters back into the perimeter of his house arrest*

Bentley: Crap i forgot...

*Bentley then crashes down at a high electric speed due to him flying before he was stopped and crashes into the ground making a slight thud loud enough to wake his mother from her nap*

Ok again another to be continued..hoped you liked it..hope i didnt offend any gays or gophers in the making of this story and those of you who like birds..no they arent generally that dumb..




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This is such a random series! I'll just fix a few errors I find, and then I'll give you the impression this part gave me. And by the way, what inspired you to make this xD?!

Greg: Dude no homo but your dad looks kinda cute today... Remember to use three :3

Bentley: First off ew... And remember spaces afterwards. sSecond that was my mom..

Bentley: Um, no it's not... iIf our old teacher was my dad idI'd just blow my brains out...


Okay, so I'll leave the rest for somebody else to correct for you. First of all, remember commas to give the reader a breath. Second, remember that an ellipsis is three periods '...'. And two other things, remember that in words such as it's, they need an apostrophe. A way of knowing whether or not a word needs an apostrophe is quite easy. Take don't for example. You would use it in a sentence instead of do not, because it's just those words mashed together, with one letter replaced with an apostrophe, which in this case is the 'o'. So for it's, it's 'it' and 'is' mashed together and the second 'i' is missing, so an apostrophe replaces it!

Now onto the story itself, this is so random and has quite a lot of references, I've seen a few 'no homo' videos on youtube which are quite funny, so I enjoyed reading this :3 I'll leave it to somebody else to give you advise on your story too, I just wanted to give you that advise with punctuation.

-Rabbit.
"Shoot for the moon, even if you miss you'll land among the stars."
--Brian Littrell.



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