Animallife 90210

You know the expression if you love something set it free? well this is what i think of whenever i hear that expression:



*Male bird and female bird doing the baby making process and then finishing*

Male: oh man i love you so much

Female: yeah well about that...um this was fun and all but i don't think its gonna work out..sorry

Male: Awe well that's OK it was fun while they lasted...plus if were meant to be together you"ll come back

*male bird in this story is overly optimistic in my opinion*

Female:..uh....yeah sure well bye...

*Female bird flies away but leaves a little present for Male bird*

Male:WTF!!! you pooped on me you meany!!

Female: well i was over here for a while and had to go sorry..

*I think Female bird doesn't really mean sorry*

Male: NO..you suck and for the record i didn't even use protection so have fun with kids without me since your leaving your crap at my house!!

Female: well that's fine and all..birds have babies but guess what i have a serious case of aids so you can just go fly into a window cleaned by Windex and snap your neck and die

Male: NO ONE TALKS TO ME LIKE THAT EXCEPT MY MOTHER...YOUR GOING DOWN!!!!!

*Male bird flies ferociously at Female bird with violent intentions*

*Female just acts cool at first but then..*

Female: OWE! you retard you missed me and broke my FREAKING BIRD NAIL!!!

Male: oh well I'm sorry you weren't complaining twenty minutes ago about my aim!!

*Female bird then gets angry and strikes back*

OK so as far as dialog goes the story is finish but go to this YouTube video for live footage of the two fighting..pretty intense....

http://youtu.be/NgPg75MKcF8

OK so during the whole fight I'm just all like whoa and ate popcorn throughout the whole scene..i guess i could have helped and the fact that they were talking was kinda interesting 0.o

i like it.. kids will love it keep it up.. just u are taking the story too Deep keep writing!!!

Thanks..i wrote it to be funny so yeah maybe it is too deep..Ill have more of these..like different parts of the same story. I don't really want to put it all in one big story though

This is some really comical stuff. I really like where you're going with this story. I know that you are not really shooting for good grammar and stuff like that, so I won't comment on that. But this is great, really funny, and I can't wait to read more!

Keep up the great work!

AngelMarie :] <3

I read this entire thing with a straight face. I'm going to be straight-forward here and say that this was very childish, and not funny at all. I'm not sure if you're writing this in some sort of texting form or something, but your punctuation and grammar is way off.

Male: Awe, well that's OK. It was fun while they it lasted...plus if were meant to be together you"(this: ' not this: ")ll come back

I'm not going to fix every sentence to make it grammatically correct, but that's an example. In a 'story' like this, grammar may not be important, and for all I know, you did that on purpose. But in case you didn't, there you go.

Male:WTF!!! you pooped on me you meany!!

'meany', really? My little sister could come up with something better than that.

and snap your neck and die

Well, this goes from childish to very violent fast, doesn't it.

...YOUR YOU'RE GOING DOWN!!!!!

You're means 'You are'. Your does not. Try to remember this, it's quite simple.

Thanks for the honesty..i wasn't really caring about the grammar at all I'm not a novelist at all and it is meant to be childish. You maybe didn't laugh because you are in to more serious writings. Also i wrote this within a 5 minute period I just thought of it one day and wrote it down a friend of mine thought it was funny so I posted it on Facebook.com and then I put it on here strictly for more views..it was meant to be elementary humor and obviously that's not your type of humor. But thanks again for the honesty and peer editing!