If I Thought This Would Happen

If I thought this would happen,
I wouldn't have let you sit by me that day.
If I thought this would happen,
I would have ignored you more often,
And have ignored you for real.
If I thought this would happen,
You wouldn't have gotten to me,
You wouldn't have been able to write me that poem,
That stupid, ridiculous, utterly sweet poem,
And then force me to hang it in my locker where I'd see it continuously.
If I thought this would happen,
I wouldn't have been embarrassed when you accused me of liking you,
When you said I blushed,
When you said you'd change schools and I blurted out "NO!"
If I thought this would happen,
You never would have gotten the chance to call your friend,
He would have never gotten the chance to ask me that question,
The question I didn't believe and completely ignored,
And therefore was ignored by you.
If I thought this would happen,
Would you really think I would have let you sit by me that day in art?
Because if I thought this would happen,
I would not be sitting here,
Feeling like an idiot,
Writing this poem about how if I thought this would happen.

hi LooneyPandaxx here!

i thought this poem was really sweet and it really captured my heart.i thought some of the sentences were a tiny bit long but im one of these people who sings poems hehe ! but over all it was brilliant! i loved it!

let me start off by saying, what a wonderful poem and even before reading it, the title does say it all:) now this poem has a great meaning and it's all realizing of a mistake that was done.more of a regret.the emotions are so real and vivid it's wonderful.the only time i stopped was that of the part where it says 'i would have ignored you more often and have ignored you for real' it kinda seems jumbled to me where it drops me out of the flow of rhythm it has me in. but overall, great poem!

You have a really good idea with this. There are so many times in peoples lives where they really just wish they can take everything back... they wish they can go back to a day where they stated liking someone and completely erase it. Sooo many ways that people can relate to that feeling.

I really like that this isn't a rhyming poem, free form has sort of gotten the cold shoulder here lately I think, so its nice to see a bit of well thought out free form =]

I really liked your descriptions. I'm sitting in one of my classes right now, so to be reading something about young love, and mistakes, while sitting in school, once again, makes it really easy to relate to. Everyone goes to school, everyone has the lockers that their friends force them to hang things in. Everyone sits by that one person in art class, that they KNOW is going to be their happily ever after, and almost always it ends up changing, and they wish that they'd just never sat down in the first place.

So well done, I think you had a great grasp on what happens in everyday teenage life.

My one iff on it is the last few lines. They just didn't seem to flow as well as the rest of the poem. Other than that, I think you have a really great piece here. Well done =]

This is a lovely poem for it's style.
I liked it- a lot.
I think you displayed the feeling really great- and the last line was genius.
But one question remains unanswered- What happened? and in my opinion it compromises the poem a bit, be cause I'm expecting an answer- and have to leave unsatisfied.

But it still was a lovely poem, even though some parts, in my opinion, could have been phrased better.
For example:
"I would have ignored you more often,
And have ignored you for real."
I just didn't like your phrasing there, but that's just me- I guess.

Anyway- Great job!
Keep writing,
SubjectBlue.

Hi there!

My comments are in red:

iheartbooks wrote:If I thought this would happen,
I wouldn't have let you sit by me that day.
If I thought this would happen, I like the repitition of this line
I would have ignored you more often,
And have ignored you for real. This line is confusing and sort of repetitive. You alreay said you would've ignored them so you don't need to say it again.
If I thought this would happen,
You wouldn't have gotten to me,
You wouldn't have been able to write me that poem,
That stupid, ridiculous, utterly sweet poem,
And then force me to hang it in my locker where I'd see it continuously. Ah, I see where this is going now.
If I thought this would happen,
I wouldn't have been embarrassed when you accused me of liking you, I have mixed feelings about this line. I don't know, it just seems out of place.
When you said I blushed,
When you said you'd change schools and I blurted out "NO!"
If I thought this would happen,
You never would have gotten the chance to call your friend,
He would have never gotten the chance to ask me that question,
The question I didn't believe and completely ignored,What friend and what question? Maybe I'll find out later on in this poem.
And therefore was ignored by you.
If I thought this would happen,
Would Do you really think I would have would've let you sit by me that day in art?
Because if I thought this would happen,
I would not be sitting here,
Feeling like an idiot,
Writing this poem about how if I thought this would happen.

Wow, I really liked the ending! I was reading through this and it kind of confused me at first, but then it started to make more sense. You left out a lot, a lot of details, leaving the reader with questions, but it worked well. Now they'll sit around, wondering what you meant by this.

Overall this is a good poem. Keep writing!