The Who, What, Where, When, and How's of Leaving

What is it about you that I cannot resist?
How do you make it so that you're always missed?
Who do you think you are, to do this to me?
When has it been alright to just get up and flee?
Where have you left me? I can't see through the tears.
Why have you done this? You left me with no one who cares.

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Comment if you'd like, it doesn't really matter. I'm just bored is all. And heartbroken. Which equals writer's block. This does end, right? I mean, you do get out of the funk at some point, don't you?

I used to feel the same way (the heart broken part) and yeah it passes and so does the writer's block. My sister is currently co-writing a novel after awful writer's block.
Just get into things you like and hang out with friends or make new friends and have fun!

A) This will help you get over the person
B)Realize you will survive
C) New experiences and hanging out and getting out might get you some inspiration!

If you need someone to talk to, I'm here. Everyone gets the life sucked outta them every once in a while. You just go with the flow and soon you'll barely remember this.

ON the poem, now.

VERY VERY GOOD. And I am not a super writer. Quite frankly, I barely write much. I write when I feel inspired but mostly, I'm a photographer with a broken camera and my sister loves this site so I thought I'd check it out and I'm also trying to earn enough points so I can post all 6 poems I've ever written.
But I am a good critic as to writing and this, is great.

There's strong feelings in it and unrequited ones, too and not only is it something that you vented with, but also help others know that there's other people like them; everyone goes through the same crap.

I would not change any of it. It's very very awesome:)

Hi, iheatbooks, Isha here to review. ^.^ And you know, right off the bat I'm going to say that I know what Writer's Block is like. It does eventually go away, but it can take a long time sometimes.

First of all, I'm just going to say that this poem is at least acceptable considering your current dilemma with the accursed Writer's Block. The thing is, though, that it's really quite boring to read, and it doesn't seem like you put a lot of thought into it. Now maybe you haven't been able to, considering you're blocked up creatively, but I'm going to be completely honest here, anyways.

I'm just going to go out on a limb here and assume that this poem is about a breakup. Now, if that's the case, then I'm going to say that yes, it's hard and emotional, but the idea is extremely overused in poetry as it is. There ate thousands of poems like this out there, even if it isn't about a breakup. There doesn't seem to be anything unique about it. Nothing that stands out and makes me bob my head in approval, or gives me that woe factor that I look for in a poem. On top of that, the rhyme scheme adds to the cheesiness of it.

I'm going to take a few seconds here and explain what I mean. Now, there are obviously poems out there that rhyme and are incredible- but they don't have to rhyme, and I usually prefer that they don't. Why is this? Well, like it has here, a rhyme scheme often limits you too much, and it can turn off some of the creativity faucets in your head. Because you're so limited to word-choice, you'll often throw in the first word that rhymes, and you let the rhyme force you to twist the rest of the line just for the sake of making it work. This results in lines that sound forces or out-of-place with the rest of the poem, and it can lead to using cliches. It can also disrupt the flow and make the individual lines sound clunky and awkward. All in all, the rhyme scheme here did all of the above. If you do plan on editing this poem, it may be wise to take a look at that.

Next I want to say that, as I mentioned before, this poem is very bland. There is no imagery that helps you relate to the poem, no unique little twists or metaphors... Nothing, really. And the imagery you do have is either cliche or just too literal. Imagery is important in most poetry because it's what makes the piece unique and gets the emotion you want to portray across in a unique sort of way. It's part of what makes a poem original and interesting to read.

Now, the emotion you're trying to actually portray here is brutally obvious, and you don't make us feel that emotion with you. It seems like it's more or less just a bunch of lines you threw onto a piece if paper and made rhyme. It needs a little depth; take the emotions you have here and poke around at them. Find what makes them what they are and find a unique, original and creative way of letting us know what you found. Whether that be imagery, metaphors, or anything else really, is up to you. Mix them together, see what you can come up with.

You see, this poem is all of the aforementioned things, but it could also be anybody's poem. There's nothing specific to you. I want to know about what you feel, and how you want to portray that. This piece isn't about every other person in the world- it's about you, so make it your own and you're set!

Often times, pushing yourself just a little bit is the best way to get your mind rolling again. As long as you don't push too hard, that is.

Hope I helped. If you have any quotations, shoot me a PM and I'll do my best to answer.

Keep writing,
~~Ish.