Storyboard (crits needed)

Spoilers if you actually want to read my comic (hahaha yeah right).

I needed a story board as free drawing/writing a comic makes the comic SUCK. AND I dont get to do any neat little stuff that one cant do without a plan.
This is basically the story board for chapter one, maybe longer.


The beginning is just some quick action, hop the train. Its hijacked. The girl is wounded, climatic roof battle, hi-jacker escapes.
Pig Doctor at next town (not city) agrees to help girl. Man needs to run errands for doctor such as gather crap and stuff.
Personality/characteristics revealed about man.

With me so far? Crits on this basic thing?

This is quite good... but i can't actually tell what is going on ha ha. and anyway, i'm checking through old threads. Good job anyway, just make your drawings clearer.

Sounds good, actually. I can understand what's going to happen through chapter one with this; thanks for the preview! And I like the drawings; not bad on the rough sketches - I like rough sketches, for some reason. Ni idea... Anyway! Good job!