Musings Apropos of Calculus

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Musings Apropos of Calculus


Oh, whose empathy may be
unbounded along the path I
chose to travel constantly

in loop resistance
(an idyllic symbolism)
of the living autumn
(still another)
?

He of whose empathy
I could derive
a partial fraction to be saved,
of which then by extrapolation
my energy
potential
kineticized
integrating my sensations
to an area
of summed good sense...

Such a one
as in my sights
has yet to travel parallel,
remains thus merely
in my visions' slumber-sands
a parting shadow, partitioned into myriad.

As time regained so rarely passes
hourglasses lack the right.
In stead of those maligned devices
cherry blossoms play my part, spiraling
in floats aflutter
counting down the waves of distance
passed in time and still
... to pass away.
Formerly 'ilyaeelz.' Others experiment with drugs. I experiment with punctuation and grammar.

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This. Is. Ridiculous. xD

I completely hate the fact you incorporated math into a literary matter. But I also kind of dig it. Darn you.

I can't really critique what I don't thoroughly understand, however, so I'll say in regards to style, I really liked it. [But all this "calculus" nonsense needs to stop!]

Haha, happy writing!




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Well, hello.
I thought it was interesting, but it was not what I expected. You see, I was hoping for a little more math. You mentioned deriving, partial fractions, and extrapolating all in one stanza. I only took one year of calc, so maybe I missed something, but I didn't see any other math involved.

That said, it was still a good poem. You seem to have a handling on creating a flow, especially in the beginning and end. In fact, I really like that last stanza. Perhaps you could work on extending that into a piece about how time flows.
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