Expressionless Emotions

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Dark demonic descriptions left lying on the page
Honestly, you want to read it?
Nostalgic nothingness, cryptic conversations
The kind that no one ever understands
And why should they?

The words fall clumsily
Misprinted apathy
It just begs the question
Why?

And why isn’t it cohesive?
You’re the instigator
Explain yourself!
Inspiring this inked sorrow
The blue reverberating on the paper like deadly wounds

Healing throughout
Each word a bandage
To the scarred mind of the writer
Toiling to get it all out
Free the emotions
In a trance inspired by you

The passion, the lust, the hatred
All now on the page
The courage, the confidence
All gone

A blood-stained work of art
Encouraged
On display

Touch the lines
And maybe you’ll understand
But why should you?
Last edited by Doubt on Mon May 01, 2006 7:11 am, edited 1 time in total.
Cuz I'm praying for rain and I'm praying for tidal waves.
I wanna see the ground give way. I wanna watch it all go down.




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That was really good. It read like a song lyric, which made it even better. I really liked this. Here, I have to quote this:

And why isn't it cohesive?
You're the instigator
Explain yourself!


Wow. Did you have a converstaion with my Internal Editor or something? Or my brother, by any chance? I've thought that to myself a million and a half times but I would never have been able to put it so elegantly. _/) :smt112




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Thankyou. Anyone else?
Cuz I'm praying for rain and I'm praying for tidal waves.
I wanna see the ground give way. I wanna watch it all go down.




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The alliteration was wonderfully done. All your words blended well together.

Healing throughout
Each word a bandage
To the scarred mind of the writer


This metaphor was excellent and one of my favourite parts of the poem. Very well done!
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~



The only fool bigger than the person who knows it all is the person who argues with him.
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