Awakened

Silence only,
Embracing death.
No opinions, never firing up my cannons,
Shooting out my bullets,
Under suppression of pleasing others
So that I am yearned by them,
Oppressing my own thoughts to
Reel in others' love.
That which stings me kills me.
Until now I've longed for life, but embraced
Silence only.


Another acrostic. Translation - Sensus Ortus = Born Senses.

Hi there!
I really like your poem. It has a lot of emotion in it. I'm not much of a poet, but by reviewing others' poetry, isn't the form of the poem supposed to be like this:

Silence only,
Embracing death,
No opinions, ever pleasing,
Never firing up my cannons,
Shooting out my bullets,
Living under suppression,
Pleasing others,
So that I am yearned by them,
Oppressing my own thoughts to reel in others' love,
That which stings me kills me,
Until now I've longed for life,
but embraced silence only

If not, then nevermind! Anyways, great poem! I liked it a lot! Great job and keep it up!

- gleek456 <3

great poem and love the words you have choosen to use.

Wow. I think it's very well spoken. Used the wrong format for it though. There should be commas.

Helloouuu, This is Demoness speaking and she's come to give her opinion on this piece!

Soo.. Well... I thought this was a great poem. BUT the flow was a bit choppy with all the dots instead of commas and the structure of the stanza was a bit wierd.. but look over the puntuation and structur and I think it gets a good A, maybe even with a +! xD

Good Luck & Keep Writing¨

// Demoness

Thanks a lot for the reviews!
I cannot change the first word of every line, as it is an acrostic, but I will work on the flow!

This was amazing! my favorite part is:
No opinions, never firing up my cannons,
Shooting out my bullets,
Under suppression pleasing others.
This poem is amazing, i wish i could give you some tips to help you improve but the problem is, you dont need to improve this rocks! i am going to start following you your poetry is exceptional!