(Writing Challenge - 4/17th) Brenaeus Bree

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Fun challenge - though I'm, ah, not much of a poet. Thoughts are welcome - written on the run.


Once a sad fellow -
Brenaeus Bree;
A wanderer of far southern seas
Looked to the jungles
Of Perth and of São’
And found something wild
(who knows just quite how)

Under the canopy
Of full blackened leaves
Dripping with dew and sorrowing weeds
He looked for some little
Furred cupid or louse
And found something wild
(for certain no mouse!)

A garish-mouth monster
Shivering breeze -
This horror of dark an’ distant trees.
It burst from the jungle
A flash and a wail -
Wings rainbow razors
(but its jaws gnashing nails).

Poor Brenaeus Bree
With a start and shout
Swinging for camera in full-fearful rout
Knew he had found aught
More than he’d tried
A bird - air pirahna
(“an alligator!” he cried).

Under still shadow
Of creeping silt rain
Shadows lay oiled and filtering day.
And all that remained
Of Brenaeus Bree -
A Polaroid camera
(last moments blurred rain).

But still in the wilds
Monster awaits
Another sad fellow
(be warned of Bree's fate).
Last edited by Poor Imp on Tue Apr 18, 2006 11:58 pm, edited 1 time in total.
ex umbris et imaginibus in veritatem

"There is adventure in simply being among those we love, and among the things we love -- and beauty, too."
-Lloyd Alexander




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This was soooooooooooooo cute!
I don't mean to come off weird but it was cute.
Nice one and I hope you win! IT WAS SO ADORABLE!
*Will later probably become neutral or switch sides.*




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Heh, thanks TBR. ^_^ It was rather fun to write as well.

(Go ahead and switch sides. It's all relative, isn't it?)

I'm glad you liked it.
ex umbris et imaginibus in veritatem

"There is adventure in simply being among those we love, and among the things we love -- and beauty, too."
-Lloyd Alexander



I’d heard he had started a fistfight in one of the seedier local taverns because someone had insisted on saying the word “utilize” instead of “use".
— Patrick Rothfuss, A Wise Man's Fear