Live

Better to feel pain
Than to feel nothing at all.
I'd rather fail my whole life through
than to have never tried at all.
Love what surrounds you,
be in awe with what you see,
let our great earth over power you,
allow yourself be free....

Hi there Kattie. Okay, quick review here!

Red = Add
Blue = correct

KattieCurtis wrote:Better to feel pain,
Then than to feel nothing at all.
I'd rather fail my whole life through,
than to have never tryed tried at all.
Love what surrounds you,
be in awe with what you see,
let our great earth over power you,
allow yourself to be free....(I would get rid of the periods.

Good job! Keep writing! <3

I'm not gonna bore you with corrections, that was already, nicely, done above.

I like this poem, it's inspiring to people who're feeling down. You're rhyming though; there was no rhyming to begin with, but then it ends in one. I know that this doesn't seem like a big deal, it's just odd.

I also like how the poem is short, yet full of emotion. It's bitter at first, then sweet. "Good job! Keep writing!" xoxo

Thank you for the corrects i didnt read over just kind of threw it out there, thank you!
Thank you for your comments much appreciated

I really enjoyed it. precise and concise.
To me it depicts the necessity to live and enjoy our lives to the fullest, whatever pain we feel there is always a way, our nature , our world ,,,if we love ourselves unconditionally and feel in harmony with nature we will receive the joy.

Exactly what I was going for, thank you