Corporate Earth

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*I got the rhythm from about 15 seconds of a Coldplay song, Every Teardrop is a Waterfall, before the song bored me and I turned it off*
**I tried to symbolize how people these days, mostly business people, may act like they care about nature, but will eventually return to "civilization"**

Corporate Earth


I watch the world outside
Give way to what's in store;
I see our nation divide,
Close the gap between the door.

You can speak the small birds' whistle
And embrace the browning owls' hoots;
Now break away from your missile
And shuck off your leopard fur boots.

I feel the top vultures' gaze
Burn dark holes into the sun;
I sense our short life's maze
Leaving all but room for fun.

You may heed the angry wind
And guide a stream down its road,
But let's see if you will bend
And return to your abode.


***Heed: Listen to
Abode: Home
Shuck: Slang; (1)to throw off [I don't know if there are other definitions for it]***
Last edited by TwinSeed on Wed Jul 27, 2011 4:32 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Wow. This was actually really good! The symbolism completely blew me away! Wow. That's all I can say right now! And you're only fifteen? Great job! Keep writing! :P
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Thank you, that's encouraging :)
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I'd have to agree with the first reviewer! You have such potential and I can see you growing so much as a writer in the future! This piece really is very good! Great imagery, awesome message portrayed! well done :)
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Bonjour Twin :P

First I’ll say, poetry isn't my forte and I don’t have anything bad to say because I found this sorta . . . . . Amazing! I absolutely love nature, so, I feel touched. =)

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Thank you Desire & Ceely, your reviews were nice and helpful to my self esteem.
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Thats actually amazing, good job very good writting :) I read it to the tune of every teardrops a waterfall, good job :)



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