Cool About wattpad. I have an account on there too but decided to try out some of the other sites. Not to sure about this one. For now I'll just read. Like the story. I'll check it out on wattpad. I'll send you a PM too. My username is greatdanes4life. Well. Bye I suppose. lol
So, first part was good-ish. I liked how you showed Rhys's personality. And I found myself hoping this doesn't become a very cliched story between poor girl/rich boy. Which is the main thing I wish you'd look out for. Don't make it cheesey or cliched. Throw in some surprises and twists and work on something more complex than just money and sex, okay?
You have some good dialogue in here. Good job! Although, I think you can do more justice to your characters and give us a better idea of Tatum (great name, btw!). I mean, sponsor for what? It's cool that she's being sponsored for education. As to Selena, I thought she was just another highschool kid until this chapter, where it sounds like she;s Dean's PA. Is that so?
Good luck! PM me for a new chapter! ~Lava
~ Pretending in words was too tentative, too vulnerable, too embarrassing to let anyone know. - Ian McEwan in Atonement
Thanks for the review! But no, this isn't a poor girl/rich boy story. Tatum isn't poor, she just can't really afford the tuition for the school. Selene isn't a TA, she's an office helper. And I hope the other chapters showcase what the story is really about. All stories are cliche in some way, because everything's been done already. I think this story will surprise readers, and thanks again!
