Wow, I see why you posted the image! The format was brilliant and really helped express the poem. For the first few lines, I didn't quite understand what was going on, but it became clear as I kept reading. Love, the format, love the poem! Great job!
"I don't cause commotions, I am one." Elphaba (Wicked the musical)
Thanks for the reassuring post! I worry about my formatting sometimes... it works in my own head, but I still can't get a good idea of how it works in other people's heads until I hear something such as the above
I apologize if my independence unnerves you. Oh, wait... no... I'm definitely not
This is one of the few times when I've seen a poem formatted this way for a reason. It helps a lot, indeed, as mentioned above by SophiaBurnette.
You've done a pretty great job on this poem! You have my admiration for this! The first part (column) is my favourite.. .especially when it says... :fall in love. Very symbolic.
Julie, a sucker for romance, historical fashion, medieval fairs and blues music. Add photography and you already know me 50%. The rest of me you'll discover through my writings and my photos.
You're poem is not only creative and powerful, it is original. The way you subliminally portray the idea of fighting to be childish is amazing. I had not looked at it like this before. A person overlooking a street brawl would most certainly think little of the brawlers, but as children? Wonderful imagery put at work, wonderful stanza structure with consistent rhythm.
I have nothing to complain about in your poem. It is thought of, crystallized and executed perfectly.
