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cathy
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Tue Apr 11, 2006 9:53 am
cathy says... · Tue Apr 11, 2006 9:53 am
Eventually this world will have
No mamals on it's face.
Space will come the living space
Of the human race.
Last edited by cathy on Wed Apr 12, 2006 4:56 pm, edited 2 times in total.
There’s nothing to do, There’s nothing to see
There’s no where to go, There’s no where to be
I’m just sitting alone, In this empty room
Writing my poem, I’m over the moon
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Elizabeth
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Tue Apr 11, 2006 11:17 am
Elizabeth says... · Tue Apr 11, 2006 11:17 am
"Space will come the living space
Of the human race,"

... What?

OK... umm, what part of this would you need help with? What's the entire.... idea of this poem? Nobody can really help unless they know it's plot. I can guess the structure, 1213. But yeah... hmm... we'll need help before we can help you.
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Snoink
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Wed Apr 12, 2006 7:30 am
Snoink says... · Wed Apr 12, 2006 7:30 am
What's the point of this poem?

A grammar issue:

no mammals on its face
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

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deleted6
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Wed Apr 12, 2006 7:39 am
deleted6 says... · Wed Apr 12, 2006 7:39 am
Okay pardon me for saying this but HUH? That me utterly confused.
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
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Elizabeth
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Wed Apr 12, 2006 11:30 am
Elizabeth says... · Wed Apr 12, 2006 11:30 am
cathy wrote:I don't really have a meaning, and it was never going to go anywhere!


Come on now. If you believe that then you shouldn't write at all. You just need to work on it, believe me people can be harsh but it's for your own good, though nobody is a Psylynx.
Repost the poem I demand you, just get a point to it.
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Heather_BlackCain
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Mon Sep 04, 2006 2:24 am
Heather_BlackCain says... · Mon Sep 04, 2006 2:24 am
uh...i honestly don't get it. but i'm sure it has a special meaning to you, and that is why you wrote it. however, poets must learn to channal their emotion of a certain situation or idea into something that people can understand. don't think i'm just being mean to you, hell i've written alot of poetry that i've had to go back and rewrite because the idea just did not transfer to an audieance. this doesn't mean you should conform to whatever you hope people might like, it just means you have to think more of what others will feel/experiance when they read the thing. much luff to you, and i hope you can figure out a way to make it work.
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electricbluemonkey
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Mon Sep 04, 2006 3:11 am
electricbluemonkey says... · Mon Sep 04, 2006 3:11 am
I don't really know why (almost) no one else understood it. I quite liked it, although I had to read it two times to understand it, but thats probably because of the spelling errors.

cathy wrote:Eventually this world will have
No mamals on it's face.


'Mamals' should be 'mammals'.

cathy wrote:Space will come the living space
Of the human race.


Space will come? Shouldn't it be, 'Space will become'?
Gotta a find a woman be good to me,
Who won't hide my liquor, try to serve me tea.
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lexy
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Thu Nov 16, 2006 2:38 pm
lexy says... · Thu Nov 16, 2006 2:38 pm
well too short... thats why no1 understands it. It isn't long enough to explain what you mean.... did you get bored or something?
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Pushca
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Sun Nov 26, 2006 2:25 am
Pushca says... · Sun Nov 26, 2006 2:25 am
uhhhhhhhh

what is it about, exactly? people killing the planet? i just thought i saw a jellyfish in the sky, so i might very well be delusional...
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Tinkerbell
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Fri Dec 01, 2006 11:46 am
Tinkerbell says... · Fri Dec 01, 2006 11:46 am
don't want to be rude but, what is this? is it an accrostic or what?
confused :?
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Lady Pirate
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Sun Apr 08, 2007 8:52 pm
Lady Pirate says... · Sun Apr 08, 2007 8:52 pm
I don't get it......
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Words without thoughts never to heaven go.'

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