World That I Create

When the sun shines in the morning
I wish it would go down
My dream world is so much better
Than the real world is now
In my dream world, I create
Who I am
What I do
I can imagine anything
Even something impossible
Like me and you
Now my world can get a little strange
But what in life isn’t
I imagine some place better
Some place fun
Some place unreal
A place where everything is happy
Where there is no right or no wrong
There is always a happy ending
Or not even one at all
It might be a never-ending story;
A story with no end
I love the world that I create
There is no pain or no heartbreak
I wish the real world was like that
Like the world that I create

Hey, pretty good start for a poem and I like the theme. It reminds me a little bit of the song Fireflies (love that song). So on to the review;
'It might be a never-ending story Something that never ends' These lines seem too similar, they're saying the same thing.

'There is always a happy ending Or not even one at all' This is good, but the secound line's flow doesn't work as well. You could say instead "There is always a happy ending. If not an end at all."
"Where there is no right or no wrong" I would take out the second "no"

Lastly, "I can imagine anything" I'm not sure if I understand this line because in the real world you can imagine anything too. So I would change that line to "Anything can happen." Or something like that.

Thanks for posting this poem, and welcome to Young Writer's Society!! Good Luck in writing!!

tgirly

Greetings! So, I can definitely identify with this poem. I think a lot of people can. I like the simple style because it lets the meaning shine through clearly, as well as giving the impression of an actual person saying the words.
I think when you say,
"Now my world can get a little strange
But what in life isn’t strange" - "strange" isn't necessary.
All in all:

Oh! Oh! I wrote something like this with the exact same title!!! I was a little suspicious upon opening it. XD You did a great job with this and i think that most of us writers can relate to it perfectly. The real world just isn't any fun. I'd rather live in the pages of a book (the pages of my book would be even better) or the worlds of my dreams. *Sigh*.

Good job and happy writing!

Veritas