I agree with Shakyll, I loved the inch by inch by inch. I thought the line that just said "they" was kind of out of place. Although, I don't know if all the questions at the end had anything to do with the beginning. I feel like you could have written a story-poem using the first part, but instead you just ended it with seemingly random questions. But, I still liked it. 
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