How Do I Taste?

Hold on tight now
To my hand
I'll lead you through it
You have to only trust me

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Eh, that's the worst stanza.

All you have to do is tell me how,
How you love me, now?
I've been here the whole time, offering my hand
Yet you are with her

Please,
Stay with me
Leave her,
Be mine

I give up,
You have finally shown
You want her more
I just have a few questions for her

I taught him how to love, did I do good?
I took his guard down, are you glad he let you in?
I made a mistake, having any luck fixing it?
He was mine first, how do I taste?

He loves me, do you know about me like I know about you?
Does he love you, like he loved me?
Are you enjoying corrupting him, feeding lies to the man that used to be so gentle?
Do you know that, no matter how hard you try, he'll make you love no one else?

The second to last stanza was by far the best one, but your rhythm was a bit off and the stanzas were so different and varying that there really aws no rhyme or reason to any of it. Even out the stanzas and then you should be good =]

Hi Alliaa! ^^ Isha here to review.

First of all, this poem is another one with its ups and its downs. There was one line that I really did like, and I think that I'll start by pointing that out. (Go with the positive first, right?)

I taught him how to love, did I do good?
I took his guard down, are you glad he let you in?

So, I'm going to start by saying what it was that I liked about this so much. The fact that you took a bit of a cliche (in the second line especially), and twisted it around. These two lines were unique, and you made them your own. They were original, they were different, and they were sort of amusing, to be totally honest. xD

On the other hand, there were a lot of lines that lacked this. For example:

Please,
Stay with me
Leave her,
Be mine

Okay, so. There are a few things that I didn't like about this. The first and foremost being how absolutely angst-filled it sounded. Honestly, it sounds extremely whiney, and just a tad desperate. Not only that, but it's extremely cliche. Yeah, obviously your poem is about wanting the guy back... but you can do better than this, I know you can.

A lot of the poem seemed like that to me, though. There was a lot of cliche, and like you said, the first stanza... well it just wasn't that great. You have a good basis, and you definitely have the ability to create a very unique poem. You've proven it with those lines that I pointed out. I want you to try and use whatever method it was that you used there and apply it to the rest of the poem. Look over your word choice, the way you use your phrases, and change whatever you think needs changing. This poem does have quite a bit of potential, but it could use some quite a bit of tweaking.

Hope I helped at least a little bit. xD

Keep Writing,
~~Ish.