A Little Thing Called Love

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Hey everyone! It's been a long while since I've actually been able to write, just getting over a bad case of Writer's Block. So, tell me what you think. Suggestions are VERY helpful. LIKE if you like it. Don't like if you don't. Just... feedback people, I love it. Thanks.

She used to think it was foolish
She used to think it was absurd
She used to be so sensible until
He made her vision blurred

He used to think he was invincible
He used to think he was strong
He used to be so powerful until
She proved that he was wrong

One moment is all it ever takes
To blind or weaken or hurt
One moment is all it ever takes
To upset, perplex, and disconcert

Some people, bless their souls
Will just be too late
But I promise, right now
I will not suffer that fate

Because no matter what anyone can say
No matter what anyone will say is true
I am not that girl, you are not that boy
And I will never end up hurt by you

Wow thats an amazing poem. You really know how to catch emotion and put it into details good job, and keep up the good work!

This is nice. I didn't get anything deep from it, but the format is very lyrical and I hope you write some music for this. It could benefit from some additional punctuation at parts to guide the reader as to where there's a pause. Example: after "souls" in the fourth stanza. Should I pause after that word or just go straight to "will"? The end of the line doesn't have an inherit pause in poetry.

By the way, I love the tone of the poem. It has a certain tenderness, but empowerment at the same time.

Thanks guys! inkwell: I'll look into punctuation. bsbfan19: thank you, I rely on emotion to write poems, so I'm glad it shows.

This is really good. You have some emotions in this poem. I like how the emotions show up in the poem especially at the end.

Hey there!
This is fantastic- it flows so well! I especially love the second last line - I found it the most powerful of them all. I love how this captures an in-control, not-about-to-go-down-without-a-fight mindset. Brilliant.

wow this is an amazing poem i realy love it!

Hey iheartbooks!

This is a really great poem and I love your rhyme scheme. You're emotion and word structure is also really good too
It has beautiful flow until the first two lines of the last stanza. They're just, kinda... Off, ya know?

Anyways, awesome job! You've earned a 'Like' from me

Keep writing,
Alzora