Life is Like a Hill

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When life brings you down,
just get back up and show life the real you.
Screw what people say about you
and think about you,
you know the truth, not them.
We may not be what other people think we are,
but we're always going to be what we want
don't like it sorry,
all I can say is
don't hate what you can't have
and don't be jealous of what you can't touch.
Once life goes on, you finally find out
that not everyone you like, don't like you back.
Not everyone that you date/dated
that tell you they love you,
is telling the truth.
So screw life and set your mind
to what you believe in.
Last edited by jolene15 on Tue Jul 19, 2011 3:15 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Howdy there!

At first glance of your poem I really like the layout. Whether it was intended or not the layout of the poem is similar to that of 'hills' which immediately relates the layout to the title. This shows extensive thinking - thinking outside the box.

I love the use of enjambment I think it helps the poem to flow nicely as the use of punctuation separates the sentences, so good choice of sentence structure.

Generally I would say your word choices are exceedingly good, however you do repeat the word 'you' an awful lot. I know you're trying to be specific but I had to read it through twice just to confirm I understood that section, so just be careful :)

Overall a really nice piece of poetry.

Well done!
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Your poem is vary realistic and well thought out.Pluse I thought the poem flowed well too.Nice job once agin.
IHI means hi backwards, forwards, vertical, horizontal, and any other way and is pronounced by saying the individual letters, like so I H I. I came up with IHI as my thing, don't take it or I will send a scary monster after you ; D




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thanks Its one of my favorites that i wrote
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I don't even know sorry
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This is a nice poem! I like the name of the poem and that you clearly explains why its called Life is Like a Hill although out the poem. You did a good job and should continue writing poems! :)




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Thanks
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Imagination is the one weapon in the war against reality.
— Jules de Gaultier