Frogskin

i'm not afraid of frogskin-
my childhood hands clasped
more cold, sticky-toed frogs
than my adolescent fingers
brushed the minds of boys.

i would listen for hours
hoping the wind would carry
the call of the tree-dwellers
so that they could rest in my palm,
my eyes wide with wonder as
a tiny pulse mirrored my own.

the other girls ran when I held
the tiny faces to their own
because they didn't understand
that warts came from toads, not frogs.

if i told you-
i'm not afraid of frogskin
would you open your eyes to me?
so that little frogs can jump
out of your muddy-green eyes
and come to rest in my palm

Spoiler

Well, it's been a while, and I'm a little rusty xD I'm not quite sure if I want to leave the punctuation and capitalization like this or not. Currently though, I meant to leave the "i's" uncapitalized.

i'm not afraid of frogskin-
my childhood hands clasped
more cold, sticky-toed frogs
than my adolescent fingers
brushed the minds of boys sorta didn't get these two lines

i would listen for hours
hoping the wind would carry
the call of the tree-dwellers
so that they could rest in my palm,
my eyes wide with wonder as
a tiny pulse mirrored my own LOVE

the other girls ran when I held
the tiny faces to their own
because they didn't understand
that warts came from toads, not frogs this was a clever little line that I really liked

if i told you-
i'm not afraid of frogskin
would you open your eyes to me?
so that little frogs can jump
out of your muddy-green pools
and come to rest in my palm I really didn't like the way you ended it with this

So I really liked this. It thought it was cute and captured how little kids act rather well. It was well written, even if you didn't capitalize "I" ever. My biggest two problems were lines 4 and 5 and the last two. They sort of interrupted the flow for me and were a little jarring. Maybe if there was some...more explanation, perhaps? Maybe if that was the case, the lines would work better. They just sort of bothered me is all. Other than that, I thought it was superb.

i really liked this poem! It was cute, and simple, showing the feelings of a little kid. The way you described frogs almost made me want to hold one.

my eyes wide with wonder as
a tiny pulse mirrored my own

I like these lines. Like I said before, simple, yet really sweet.

The last reviewer got most of the stuff I wanted to say... so overall your poem was awesome!

It's very cute and very simpleminded, just like a little girl holding a frog. It's nothing short of perfect for me. I love how you dropped capitalization as it added to that childish effect. It's very clever

Veritas

Awww, I really liked this! Normally I'm not a huge fan of poetry - I either have to be in the right mood to read the right piece at the right time, or I have to be a devoted fan of the poet to spend more than a second or two looking at this. This, however, was a really enjoyable little piece. What I especially liked was that it seemed to be a reminiscence, a snapshot in time, and a musing about what the future might bring all at once. You might consider adding some periods - the full stops would have helped me out the first time I read it, since I didn't really find the rhythm till my second read-through. Overall, though, I really liked the imagery you used here.

Thanks for posting!

- Ari