A Scratch Beneath The Surface

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Every color is part of another.
And so I thought I was a rainbow rock
on a mountain full of gray,
only to scratch the surface of a boulder
and find a dazzle inside my brothers.

Oh, I'm a hermit crab without a shell
that managed to find a home
in that of a tortoise.
He's a hundred years old,
and my fragility gives me no reason
to be angry at the speed of his steps.

It's all a paradox!
It's all a paradox!
Putting the wise to shame!

I'm a black jaguar hidden in jungle.
Not many can find me,
but none the less I pounce.
Shall you place me in a cage?
I've got a wild streak,
and you'll be the victim
of a playful bounce off my paws.

It's all a paradox!
It's all a paradox!
Putting the wise to shame!

It's all a paradox!
It's all a paradox!
Must a lion like the lamb at the slaughter be in pain?
"He laid emeralds in our eyes. Oh, but I'd already tried a bracelet made of gold and scarlet thread around her wrist. And everything was wrong, so we sang sentimental songs. Oh how seldom we belong, but how elegant our kiss." -Norma Jean "Memphis Will Be Laid To Waste"




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WOW! that was pretty freakin amazing. I loved it. I espically liked the topic you choose to write about.

I cant wait to read more of your work. :)
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Wow, I usually hate poetry, but this is really good. The style is really good, the story it's telling is amazing. I wish all poetry was this good. I don't see anything wrong with this poem. It seems perfect to me. Thank you for this. Good luck with your future writings. May you be shielded from Writer's Block.
I am.... a New Age Inkling! We must continue the fight for young authors, for it is the brave mans part to write with glory or with glory be rejected! (taken from a fellow New Age Inkling, Highlander)

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YOU USE PARADOXES SO WELL! You are very talented! I love the ending! Really counter acts the typical "wisdom" society deems! Keep writing it is great!



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