No name yet Help would be loverly

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(intro)
Down in my heart I feel a dart
This dart pierces me more than anyone else

If I said I love you, would you say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

These answers tear me apart,
Making me feel like I don’t belong,
Maybe I was never meant to love,
I might as well not try.

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

These thoughts of me without you,
Crush me and my spirits,
I might be dense and you love me as well,
This drives me to try.

A light of hope fills me
I start to believe its not me
This is how I feel
If you don’t love me

Tell me, tell me, tell me,
Don’t say no and later come back

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

I don’t care!! For either way.
I still Love you and your still there

So, if you are still there I will love you just as much,

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same,
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

So that is all I have to say,
So I'll let you on your way
Last edited by Poetriez on Fri Apr 14, 2006 6:49 am, edited 1 time in total.
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This dart pierces me more than anyone one else


Do you want the extra "one"?

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same


I would suggest using the full word "you," just for literacy's sake.

I don’t care!! For either way.
I still Love you and your still there


Check your punctuations in this.

So ill let you on your way


*I'll*

Other than that, my general lyrics suggestion, without having heard the song, would be to check that your syllables seem fairly comfortable- flowing and not too forced.

Sorry, I really can't think of a title.

I'd like to hear this song!

DG
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thanks I forgot to spell check it and stuf fhaha
War is war
Nothing else
Nothing more

-J.G. Follett



We think in generalities, but we live in details.
— Alfred North Whitehead