I'm sure

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Not the most cheerful of poems I admit but it needs reviewing so here we are! Thanks in advance

For as sure as the wind blows,
Your lifetime has passed,
As sure as the moon glows,
Your memory will last.

As sure as the light shines,
there will be darkness again,
As sure as the sun shines,
There must also be rain.

For you are the wind,
The moon, rain and sun.
And the journey for you,
Has only begun.’

What do you mean? It's beautiful! Well, it's not the most cheerful, but it's definitely not depressing. It's hopeful and realistic. Just wondering,though, if you intended to put the apostrophe at the very end?

I really love this. It's beautiful and the echoing adds a great effect. No criticisms here! Bravo!

I liked it except there was one little thing you can change.

As sure as the light shines,
there will be darkness again,
As sure as the sun shines,
There must also be rain.

A little redundant there, the light shines and the sun shines, and you're rhyming the exact same word, you might want to change that. Other than that, no other criticisms. Great work, I loved it! Keep Writing!

I found this poem excellent. It flows quite nicely and is well written. I can't find anything in this poem that could be improved. You did a wonderful job.

Hello my Ally! You say this piece needs reviewing... but I cannot agree. Good structure, no flaws neither when it comes to flow nor rythm. Even with my looking-glasses on I couldn't find any grammatical errors and you DID use punctuation so all is well. Sure, it wasn't the most cheerful piece maybe but I still thought it was beautiful and it wasn't THAT depressing All I can say is that this came very close to perfect and I'll give you 5/5 spiders.

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

This is a really beautiful piece. The flow and the rhythm was flawless. The theme was quite good, a mixture of sadness and hope combined. I especially liked the stanza,
" As sure as the light shines,
there will be darkness again,
As sure as the sun shines,
There must also be rain."
The way it says that good things don't last forever and the bad things come to an end.
A really good read, I must say. Keep going