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I know your afraid,
I see you,
Curled up behind that mask
Hiding in solitude from the world

I see you watching,
Silently,
As these walls crumble down around me.
Can't you tell that I need you now,
More than ever?

Can we withstand the pain together,
Like we used to?
Stay strong for one another
Can we face the world?

You can't hide from me,
We are a part of eachother
And i can't live without you
Not now.
Not anymore.

Everyday I look into your eyes
And I hope that someday,
You will come back for me.

Until tomorrow my dear.
Regards,
The girl behind the mirror.

Awesome poem. Now, I would like to correct the mistakes.

I know your afraid, -comma for pause and dramatic effect.
I see you.
Curled up behind that mask,
Hiding in solitude from the world

I see you watching,
Silently.
As these walls crumble down around me.
Can't you tell that I need you now?
more then ever. 'then' is different from 'than'. Then shows passage of time, in this case you need to use 'than' to show comparison.

Can we do this together,
like we used too? -'too' is also different from 'to'. 'too' is used for exagerration or saying that something is similar to another. 'to' on the other hand is to show the passage of time which is what you need in this case.
hold strong for one another, comma, for another pause.
can we face the world?

You can't hide from me,
you know that.
and i can't live without you. -capitalize, put full stop to signify the end of the sentence.
not now.- capitalize and then take off the period, replace with a comma to connect the last two lines, it makes better sense.
not anymore.

Everyday I look into your eyes
And I hope that someday,
you will come back for me.

Until tomorrow my dear.
Regards,
The girl behind the mirror.

I like the idea behind the whole poem, mysterious but captivating. If you're looking for a title I would suggest 'Reflection' as it is the whole point of the poem. Happy writing!

Hi there!

As I was reading, I noticed there was a few grammatical errors, but the main one, I saw was that some lines starts with a capital while others don't. Like here:

itsjustemilie wrote:more than ever.

All the previous line in this stanza has been capitalised, why haven't this. I think that you need more of a pattern of some sorts on capitalisation. Some people put a capital at the beginning of every line, that's cool and some people do it whenever they put a full stop and that's cool too. But, just randomly capitalising stuff and randomly not capitalising stuff is not so cool. So, I'd suggest that you work out your capitalisation pattern or something.

I'm not sure if you're aware of this. But, this line, is wrong:

itsjustemilie wrote:I know your afraid

Your is supposed to be you're.

Yanni1995 has pointed out a few as well. Now, this might just be me, but I find that errors like that is really distracting and drive me away from the main point of the poem. I'd suggest you go over it and fix up the grammatical errors. That's all.

I know your afraid comma here for dramatic emphasis
I see you.i think a comma would work better here sine you're continuing the thought in the following lines
Curled up behind that mask
Hiding in solitude from the world

I see you watching,
Silently. again, comma here instead. Punctuate as closely to prose as poetry can allow.
As these walls crumble down around me.
Can't you tell that I need you now? comma instead
more than ever. question mark instead. this will make it flow better

Can we do this together, 'this' is very vague and boring
like we used to?
hold strong for one another this line seems a little awkward,
can we face the world?

You can't hide from me,
you know that. this seems threatening instead of desperate,
and i can't live without you
not now.
not anymore. why 'not anymore'? Elaborate

Everyday I look into your eyes
And I hope that someday,
you will come back for me. this whole stanza is a cliche

Until tomorrow my dear.
Regards,
The girl behind the mirror. oo I love this twist at the end! Everything falls into place now. Bravo on creativity.

I liked the idea in this poem and with a bit of tweaking this will be great :]
-KatTrain

thanks a tonne guys! I'll obviously spelling and punctuation is a issue of mine. I'll take into account all of your corrections and suggestions and hopefully improve my poem