Kelsy the Snowgirl

I found this the other day. It's a story I wrote at age 5. I'm typing it exactly as it was written (exception: quotation marks). I know the grammar is TERRIBLE, and it is a little weird, but I think it's sorta cute! :3

Kelsy the Snowgirl
By PenPrincess (Penni) at age 5

One day, in the faraway land of Snowville, there lived a small Snowgirl named Kelsy. Everyone called Kelsy Kel. Kel has one snowdog, Sugar. Kel lives on a farm with a big field. One day Kel and Sugar went into the snow-covered field. There, Kel found a small snow-covered flower. "Hi! My name's Lee!" said the flower. Kel brushed the snow off the flower. "Who are you?" Kel asked the flower. "I'm Lee!" said the flower. "Oh." said Kelsy. "Anyway," said the flower, "Why was 6 afraid of 7?" Kel shrugged. "7 ate 9!" said Lee. Kel stared at Lee, then she picked up Lee, and put her in a vase for her mom. And from then on, Lee was telling jokes to Lee's mom! The End

Because you wrote it when you were five, I can't really critique it too harshly, now can i?
Suffice to say that you had a very active imagination back then.
When you posted it, however, you should have corrected the paragraphs, like this:

There, Kel found a small snow-covered flower.
"Hi! My name's Lee!" said the flower.
Kel brushed the snow off the flower.
"Who are you?" Kel asked the flower.
"I'm Lee!" said the flower.
"Oh." said Kelsy.
"Anyway," said the flower, "Why was 6 afraid of 7?"
Kel shrugged.
"7 ate 9!" said Lee.
Kel stared at Lee, then she picked up Lee, and put her in a vase for her mom. And from then on, Lee was telling jokes to Lee's mom! The End

However, as you can see, it makes for a very thin story. o avoid this, you should add more description and activity between the dialogue.
Jenth out.

Hey there,

Not going to review, but I think that this story is so sweet from a five year old

Thanks, Jenthura and Nyx!
As I mentioned before, I wanted to type it exactly as it appeared on the bright pink construction paper, except for the quotation marks. (I didn't learn how to use them until I was six!) I didn't space the paragraphs because I figured that with the quotes, it should still at least be readable. Thanks again guys!

I think you wrote well for a five year old. I don't remember my sentences being that cohesive when I was that age. It's really cute.

Aww, this was cute! Considering you were only five when you wrote this.. I thought it was pretty good
Ahahaha! I don't even remember what my writing was like when I was five... yikes it was probably awful. Anyways, I'm not going to critique this, but I just wanted to say that it seemed pretty good for a five year old
Oh and by the way, loved how you added in that joke in your story (;
ahahahah

SO cute! I cant believe you were 5 when you wrote this? I cant even hold a pen at that age !
haha... anyway, this is good and super cute ! Nice

Hi! Just wanted to tell you how sweet I thought this piece to be. You were so creative then, and, of course, now. I remember now I wrote a story about cinderella when I was about that age ( five) and I gave it to my nan. She Loved it!
I'm going to go and dig it out now! lol...you've inspired me!
~ Amelia