All About Me

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What should I do next?

Poll ended at Sat May 28, 2011 4:04 am

  • Another poem 78%
  • Next chapters of my story No votes
  • A short story No votes
  • All of the above No votes
  • Poem and next chapters 11%
  • Poem and short story No votes
  • Next chapters and a short story 11%

Total votes: 9

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PLEASE! Only open this when you are done reading everything including the last spoiler (I trust you guys so don't let me down :) )
Spoiler
Hehe... This is a wonderful poem is it not?...You probably thought that it is so negative but it is accually all positive... This is accually true my classmates saved me from a suicide jump


Spoiler
This poem is about myself and my two views on how I think people think of me
And also you may be surprized to see that my last poem was very happy and joyful and this is so sad and dark


This is what they think the world thinks of them
For a pessimist,
not
For an optimist

I am nothing.
There is no chance that I will believe that
I have a purpose.
I am happy because
I sit in the corner while others work but
Will someone care if
I am so useless.
I doubt that
I write because I am happy.
I have mental problems.
They do not care if
I am accident prone.
I do not believe that
God loves me.
I know in my heart that
Everybody hates me.
It is impossible for me to think that
People will mourn for me.
When I am dead
I can be optimistic.
I have my troubles but
It is too much for me to handle those problems.
There is no possible way that
I made a difference in someone's life.
They will say that
I was a weak, unsociable coward.
They will not say
Everything good I have done.
I believe that people will love
Me when I am dead.
They will be happy if they see
That I do not believe that
There is hope.
This is real.


And and I was about to jump until my classmates stopped me and then, thanks to my friends, I have REVERSED my thinking, TURNED BACK on the sadness and when I felt DOWN, GO UP.
Spoiler
In case you did not understand the clue: READ THE POEM AGAIN FROM DOWN TO UP




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That was really good... It very nearly made me cry. And sadly, that was probably because I realized that I think more like the poem going top to bottom... I really need to change my point of view. I thought it was really neat how you could read it bottom to top and the meaning would be totally opposite. The feeling you put into the poem is so real and easy to relate with. Keep writing, that was an amazing poem! :)
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Wow. That's all I can say! I am really speechless. The poem was able to connect with me and as a reader that is gravely important. But, the amazing thing is, you did it TWICE! With the same piece of writing! That is truly remarkable and I am VERY, very happy that you are still here today to share this work and I look forward to more!

-Amnien
Simply Crazed.

Once you see death up close, then you know what the value of life is. - SAW VI




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Hello there =]. I will have to be honest, and say that this isn't my favorite. Not that it wasn't good, I just wasn't feeling it. The rhythm jumped a lot. I did like however, that if you read it from bottom to top, that it changed the message. That was really neat. =] But I think overall, the poem had a nice structure, nice sound, beat, etc. Nice work =]
TylynTyrannosaurus<3 (tydecker777)




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Brittany

Hello! Honestly, I also couldn't get into this poem. I think that the poem is... I don't know how to explain but yeah.
The truth will come out baby, and you'll be the only one lost in the dark >:)



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