More manga!

Hello everyone,

Firstly thanks for clicking the button and viewing this, it is really appreciated. Now, if you saw my previous manga drawing then please let me know if this is better or worse in your personal opinion, if you haven't already seen my previous drawing and you want to compare the two drawings then the link is here >http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic79937.html. Please comment and I will be very grateful.
From CuteJackRussell
p.s. Constructive criticism is definitely welcome
p.p.s. Sorry if the link doesn't work properly, it's my first go at trying to post a link.
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Heyy there =], this is good. Definitely for someone of your age =]. The eyes are cute. If you want to make the perrrfect manga, you should look at different books and tele shows, find the right proportions. The bottom of the face is a little bit too small. But its a very very good try =] Keep it up =]

This is great. The eyes look just a little uneven, but that might just be me. Apart from that, I thought it was really good. Sorry if this isn't very helpful, I'm not very good at reviewing artwork. Keep up the great work!

Thank you for the comments so far everyone. They are all very helpful, informative and straight to the point so thank you a lot it is very appreciated.

Hey Jack! This is really nice. First of all, I love the detail that you placed into her expressions. Her eyes really give out a nice mood for the viewer. I love the glow shine she has on her eyes, it's well-detailed. The blush-thingy she has on her cheek really gives out a nice manga-feel.

I've got some problems with this though.Her hair seems to be very simple for me, it would be better if you placed more effort into it. the shape of her face needs more improvement, you should let it widen a bit more, but that's just my personal preference of her. I think her eyes occupy around 40% of her face, so I guess you should make it a bit smaller.

You really have a great style! If you keep on drawing, then you'll maybe a good manga artist when you grow up, keep up the great work! Don't let anybody let you down about your work because they're totally awesome. Have a nice day okay?

Overall:
concept - 4.5/5
style - 5/5
~ Vitty

Hey, you! I'm so glad you posted this. I was never able to draw this stuff at your age.
The first thing that caught me was the eyes. One is noticeably bigger than the other. Also, if you look closely, one of the pupils is darkened where the other is not. Just a small consistency issue, there. You did a great job at keeping the eyelashes even!
The ponytail defies gravity x) Unless she made the ponytail at the very top of her scalp, it should be standing straight up like that, but more to the side. Try fixing your own hair that way and you'll see how it falls
Well, that's all the advice I have for now! Let me know if you need anything and I'll be glad to help
~blacksheep

Well, you can still improve your skills. By the way, art is not what it looks like! It's about how it's created.
Honestly, I'm not really "that good" at drawing. But I've improved my skill based on my mistakes. As I've said, as long as there's passion, your work would be beautiful. So keep it up and be inspired.

Hey! That's a pretty good anime picture! But there are a few things that you need to improve on. I believe you were trying to make an anime girl, but no offense. It looks more like a boy. (Sorry) The eyes are uneven and the one on the right is a lot bigger than the left eye. The nose seems weird as well. Under the eyes, there are some random lines. I'm not sure if they're suppose to be there or not, but they're bothering me. I think they're wrinkles or something. I believe those are unnecessary. The hair is okay, but not great. Needs some kind of improvement. Maybe you could use a reference for that. The eyebrows seems like they are forming a unibrow. And they are a bit misshaped. Well. It's still pretty good. But you could improve a bit. But I think you are getting better. Im sorry if I was a bit mean in this message. I'm really angry right now because my brothers are annoying me. So, please don't take it personally.

Hey I have come to review!
Overall its a nice picture, not to bad for your age. I suggest you start off coping others work or just watching and looking at manga. I suggest getting books from the library or drawing grids over the picture you wish to copy.

There are issues with the proportion, drawing lines or light sketchy outlines might help. One eye is better than the other, this is not okay from the angle you are taking. It is a lot easier to draw people from the side I suggest you try that. Also the hair is not 'manga' there are many internet tutorials on that type of stuff. There and also a few unnecessary lines. And the line need to be cleaner and more angular but the other reviewers hare really outlined most of the problems.

Really you will get better with practice! Good luck

I think it's alright. I would just add color!!

Sorry, but I think I have to say that I liked the boy better.

The girl seems like you worked too much on her...
Her problems are:
Like the boy, the two white balls in the eyes when you could use only one.
Her eyebrows are almost connected - whereas more manga and anime's eyebrows are pretty far from each other.
Her mouth is too tall.
Her hair is too long for the shape of her head.

Sorry if I seem harsh, but I've seen many, many, many pictures of anime drawings and you said constructive crit. would be appreciated!

Keep drawing,
Alzora

Hi everyone,
Thank you so much for the constructive criticism it has been very helpful and I have been able to apply your advice to many of my later manga drawings which I will post soon so keep an eye out.
From CuteJackRussell