crushing me to pieces

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this is written from two peoples point of view, i've never done this before, and i'm not to good at love poems, so bare with me :)



If the rivers freeze,
Will you stay with me?
I need your sweet, forgiving heart,
for my own is tart.
Your long, graceful hands,
For mine are rough and scared.
your soft, curly hair,
For mine is straight and dark.
You complete me,
And destroy me at the same way!
Your soft brown eyes,
Look at me through long, dark lashes,
Meeting my cold and hard ones,
Crushing me to pieces…


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If the heavens fall,
You’ll still be my all.
I need your self confidence,
For my darkest days.
I need your understanding eyes,
For when I’m not strong
Your fixing brain,
For when I can’t.
Your light humor,
Because mine is dark.
Your forgiving heart,
Mine is too evil.
Your sweet words,
For when no actions are needed,
Your love,
Is crushing me to pieces.
Last edited by blondeshorty01 on Sat May 21, 2011 1:35 am, edited 1 time in total.




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i liked that alot! u ARE good at love poems! i loved the contrasting between the two people.... lovely XD
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that is really powerful.:
(:***BREAKAWAY***:)



Outside of a dog, a book is a man's best friend. Inside a dog, it's too dark to read.
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