An Inopportune Visit From Inspiration

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There are indentations, I swear. It's even in story format. Can you tell? No.
Let me know about the ending--should I bring it back to when Inspiration visits again, or leave it hanging?

Why?! Why must inspiration come to me at such an inopportune time?!
I can't write right now!! I'm busy!! This is neither the time nor the place for you to visit, Inspiration. Can't you see I'm in the middle of doing something else? I have no pen! No paper! No laptop or desk computer is within my reach! Go away and come back later. I'm not speaking to you right now.
Seriously, why couldn't you have shown up when Writer's Block was visitng? That would have been the perfect time. I was all set to write--no one else was home, I didn't have any distractions at all (which is rare) and I had not one, not two, not even three, but four means of writing at arm's length! I was ready for you, then. I had everything prepared! I wanted you to come!
But nooo, you had better things to do. Did you have fun? Hm? Oh, don't you even try lying to me. I know you were with Megan--do you think I'm blind? I saw what she posted online. You ought to be ashamed of yourself.
Now, go away. I don't have the time or the desire at the moment. See? This is me, ignoring you. Leave. Now.
On second thought, wait! I want you to stay. Yes, stay! You owe me, mister. Stay right there until I'm done. I don't care if you're not a dog! You stood me up before, and you're darn well gonna pay for it now. Stay!

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Alright, Inspiration! Now I can pay attention to you. What've you got for me? Inspiration? Are you there? Inspiration! Where did you go?! Come back! I didn't mean it! I wasn't actually mad at you, I promise! Inspiration, please! You can have all of my chocolate! Writer's Block wouldn't take it, anyway! Inspiration? Inspiration!!
Last edited by fireheartedkaratepup on Thu May 19, 2011 1:59 am, edited 1 time in total.
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I just had to tell you, that made my day^^
Describes my weekend perfectly!




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Go away an come back later. I'm not speaking to yous right now.


Other than those two mistakes, you did great! I love this piece so much I *liked* it. :D
Oh, but also:

I don't care if you're not a dog!


What does that mean? Anyways, regardless of your intended meaning, it would still sound better as this: "I don't care if you aren't a dog!"
Or does it? :? Hmm, not really in a reviewing mood right now. :(
Regretfully,
Jenth
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Love it! That sounds like me! Ha,ha!

Other then the 'yous' that needs to be 'you' I did not see any mistakes.

Keep Writing,
~FW~
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