Fear

Fear, a horrible thing.
Just the feeling of it stings.
Haunting thoughts linger,
Attempts to forget are hindered.

Umm... Short is often sweet, but I really do think fear is too complex of a subject to be summed up in four lines. You did do a very good job with what you did do, the whole thing rhyming and such... The words you've selected are pretty good, I just get the feeling of wanting more of this poem. Keep writing.

Thank you very much for your criticism. This was one of my first poems, and I've been actually wanting to make it longer for a little while. I wrote it in 10 minutes so that does not exactly allow for much expression.. Thanks for the encouragement.

I totally agree with adding more to it. I think if you are able to keep up that descriptive lagnuage you should easily be able to make a really touching and complex poem that would be so fun to study. Try to add in why you are scared, what is making you fearful. Just a few tips, nothing you have to take to heart

Thanks!!! I would love to add more to it. There are a lot of things that haunt me daily. I promise to you and EtCetera that I'll make it longer one day, ok? lol It's just that...I've had an immense writer's block for at least 3 months now. Haven't written a poem in a long time that hasn't been for a class assignment. *sigh* Sorry for that lol Thanks for the awesome tips! They really help.

Fear, a horrible thing.
Just the feeling of it stings.
Haunting thoughts linger,
Attempts to forget are hindered.
THIS IS AWESOME but the last part doesnt flow, it rymes just doesnt ring like
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Fear, a horrible thing.
Just the feeling of it stings.
....................................

other than that it awesome

this is a pretty good poem. i know you said it would be short, but i didn't expect just one stanza. I think it rhymed pretty well, but you should try to think of the bigger picture. I think short would be two or even three stanzas, but you did pretty well, and good job
KEEP WRITING!!!!!!


-Kat

@WRITINGNEON: Thanks lots! I know the last line's a bit iffy but Like I said, I wrote in a short amount of time and hindered was the only word I could think of in such a short amount of time. It was one of those class activities where you have to write a poem in a super short burst of time!

@katngo73: Thank you!! Well, when I said short, I meant it lol Thanks again! I've been meaning to work on it but I need inspiration... I'm also trying to see how much of a message I can put in few words.