the tenses of love..

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Firestarter
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Wed Mar 22, 2006 8:41 pm
Firestarter says... · Wed Mar 22, 2006 8:41 pm
This seems like a sequel to that famous poem that starts "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways." [EDIT: Elizabeth Barrett Browning]

So to me, this is nothing original. You said you didn't want imagery, that's fine: but the poem is nothing new. Of course, if you weren't striving for an original voice, then that's fine, but unambitious.
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Thu Mar 23, 2006 1:16 am
xanthan gum says... · Thu Mar 23, 2006 1:16 am
i admit that i found this rather average, cardboard cut and dull. pershaps you can expand on this vision of black and white love to something more eloquent and poetic.
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What is a poet? An unhappy person who hides deep anguish in his heart, but whose lips are so formed that when the sigh and cry pass through them, it sounds like lovely music.
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