Dear, YWS

With friends
and with enemies life
feels kinda tough.

I don't like the way this runs. Maybe move "life" down to the third line?

Favorite line:

Everyday I visit you
hoping to be featured
but I never am.

Totally felt, dude. When you post something, you hope it becomes so phenomenal that it becomes known to the entire community you're posting it to.

I really liked your piece. (: Keep writing, please and thank you!

~Panda;;

Awesome job haha. Oh I believe everyone hasn't done their homework due to this awesome site at one point or another!!! Like me XD I'm suppose to looking up stuff for my debate in less than three hours XD. Oh dear, anyways this was amazing and good job on getting the featured work!!!!! You did great ^^ Good luck and Keep up the good work. Hope to see more of your work soon!!!!
Soulkana<3

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You kinda just stole my feelings about YWS right there....

Haha this was a sort of a reality check for me. I found myself whispering yes in agreement to pretty much all of what you said in your poem! So well done and keep it up xXx

xD I wrote about this a while ago and it got featured as well! I love it

I love how it starts off like it;s gonna be a critical poem about how YWS is making your life hard with this:

Thanks to you
I never finish my
homework.

Thanks to you
my chores are never
completed.

My poor family
is neglected and
alone.

And then it goes off to being a 'Thank you' poem:

But you YWS
have made me
a new person.

I no longer watch
T.V or pig out on boredom food
I write.

I write poetry
and make new friends
though I don't even know who most of them are.

My life is
easier with you
here.

My life began to
grow and revolve around
you, YWS.

Love it! congrats on being featured! keep up the good work!

Yay for you! This got featured!! I've only been a member for two months now, and I got two of my poems featured recently, too, so I was very happy about that!
Any tiny mistakes I noticed were already pointed out, and the only thing otherwise I would comment on would be that sometimes you have a really long line at the end of a stanza that still fit what you were trying to say, but it just seemed out of place. Like this.

I write poetry
and make new friends
though I don't even know who most of them are.

This is a really neat poem. Keep writing!!

Haha... I really liked this. It was funny, but true. I've been through the everyday stalking myself, too. Like the part where you mentioned that you dreamed of being featured, but never are. I felt that way, too. Hihi... this is so cute. I'm sorry. I can't review this.

Keep writing and stalking.


Jash ♥

Really witty but true nonetheless.

I no longer watch
T.V or pig out on boredom food.
I write.

- I love this stanza because it speaks to me.

With friends
and with enemies, life
feels kinda tough.

- just wanna point out that the stanza doesn't make sense if you don't use punctuation marks.

Happy writing!

First of all I would like to say: "Kind of" is too grammatically correct, as is "sort of." "Would of" or "should of," however, are not. In those cases "of" should be "have" or " 've."

Anyways.

As a poem, yes, this actually is kind of bland - there's no imagery. But I can see a lot of potential imagery. Example: "My chores are never completed." There's a LOT of potential here - instead of the bland line "my chores are never completed," you could say something about moldy dishes piling up in the sink or something. There are a lot of lines in here like that - very general, vague lines that could be transformed into something amazing with the right images.

Also, there would not be a comma after "dear" - instead the comma would go after "YWS," as in "Dear YWS, thanks to you..." etc. There are a few other typos, but that one really bugged me.

Overall, though, like I said, this has a lot of potential. I think this is especially true since probably most of us on this site feel exactly this way about it. (I for one still complete my homework and do my chores, but I do love coming on this site and seeing new notifications, and it's the only site on which I really feel like I have friends even though I don't know any of them in real life. Before this site I shunned the idea of Internet friends...oh, well.)

So give this some work and let me know when you do, because I'd love to see it!

~Blue

Hi.. Awesome poem!! I just loved it!! It was so true and something I related to... Good job.. YWS deserves this poem!! You've done a good job by writing something for it!!
Harshita:)

I really loved this poem.
I think you perfectly explained each and every one of us here.

It's great how you in the beginning it started out as critical as though it was ruining your life. Then, the mood changed into a thank you letter as if it were your main reason for living.

Sincerely your biggest stalker,

I like this line a lot. It's a creative way of saying the endless amount time you spend here.

Keep writing.
~bluepen19