You don't understand

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If you didn’t have another day in your life,
Got nothing to worry bout ‘cept all your daily strife,
I can’t wait for ever though, baby please make up your mind,
‘Cause if you don’t one day, you will find,
That I can’t stay for ever, ‘N I know that you’re clever,
So make up your mind cause,

Chorus:
If it don’t matter to you, Baby don’t mean it don’t matter to me,
If you don’t know what to do, Baby don’t mean I don’t know how to see,
Oh-oh-oh runnin’ aha you wont find me there,
Oh-oh-oh runnin’ aha its rude to stop and stare,

I know, I know, I know now what to do,
Cause I can’t wait much longer to hear from you,
So I’ll make up my mind,
Eventually I will find,
Something true, someone new,
Something that isn’t you,
Cause

Chorus

It makes you see,
That what you’re doing to me,
Just aint fair,
So don’t you dare,
Try to be my friend,
Cause we have come to an end…

2x Chorus




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Good one. I would suggest to make the chorus shorter and work on the last part a lil bit more.
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Hi there!

I really liked this song. When I was reading the chorus the first time through, I found myself hearing this as a pop song. Yeah, I know. ;) In my head, it had a nice beat and a catchy tune. Not that that helps or anything. ;)

I the rhymes in here were good, not too cheesy. Overall, I liked it. I hope you find a tune for it! :)
Forever for All <3

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I really liked this, it had rhythm to it and nice lyrics :) So keep writing ! xXx
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