Wondrous Mother Earth

I`m a total nature freak so I LOVED this thank you for writing!

What a beautiful poem! I also admire and really like nature! I really like the imagery in this poem. It just makes the reader visualize like the "violet flower" and the "sunset." For example,

"A violet flower blossoms in the sun,

To be enjoyed by everyone,

A sunset rich in deep deep gold,

Should be for everyone to behold,

A shimmering star in the sky,"

I really like this! Although, I noticed you use a purple color font and a different type of font. You should definitely stick with the standard font and font color. It's just like what one user, MeanMrMustard, said to another user, "I must say the choice of changing the font size is questionable right off the bat. Not as a matter of the poem itself, but the impression and form given apart from the poem. Sadly people are vain, and there seems to be among many possible readers an expectation to be greeted the familiar, which can stream off in numerous, numerous ways. Unless you have tantamount reason to do so or are writing a style that demands in as much, avoid changing the size of your font."

Another thing is that you shouldn't use ellipses, such as in this line, "...No one should let that sight pass by," because it gives the reader an impression that there's more before the line than what you wrote. So, you should remove the ellipses. Lastly, I think you meant to write Nature's in the line, "Natures beauty spread far and wide,"

Although, I like how you use rhyme to create rhythm in the poem. For example,

"A song sung by a nightingale,

Should never ever be on sale,

A splendid roaring waterfall,

Should always be there for all,"

I like these lines. Overall, the poem is beautiful and such a delight! I think you can make it an anthem for nature! Keep writing poems! With some improvement, this poem will just be more wonderful!

Hi there. Lavvi in to review.

Next time you post, keep the font and colour plain. Less distracting and makes for an easier read

This was okay. A few parts were hard to grasp their meaning and I think it's because you mixed up some words. I also feel like you just wrote stuff down for the sake of writing it down and so it doesn't have a very meaningful ring to it. It could: the poem has so much potential, but just be careful how you place everything.

Yours,
Lavvi

Okay, Tori here! I apologise in advance for the harsh review. Take it with a grain of salt.

So; I didn't like this poem. The purple and bold and italics almost made me not read it. Please fix those in the future.

Overall; I really didn't get anything out of this. I got: "The flower is purple. The sky is gold. Don't hurt the Earth." Not exactly a riveting message. Perhaps you would improve upon your imagery. Instead of "A violet flower blossoms in the sun," try telling us about the flower in poetic language. Something like: 'A wisp of purple velvet under harsh light- it blooms; majestic." So, yeah, that's a bad example, but so you see what I'm getting at? I gave you an image of a purple flower blooming in the sun, but I never even said it was a flower. A huge rule is "Show, don't tell." Awesome,you told us there's there's a flower. Now make us see it!

Now; your rhyming was very simplistic- sort of like something a little kid would write. sun/one; gold/behold; sky/by.... none of these rhymes are supported by good imagery to make them seem clever. That said; your rhyme scheme is fairly solid. Your rhythm was bad; though. For example- this line:

Should never ever be on sale

practically screams 'I just needed a word to rhyme with nightingale, so I jumbled a bunch of words together to keep up the beat and tacked on the word "sale"!' You're more clever than that. Instead of "never ever", try something a bit more interesting and professional. The same for this line:

Should never to man-made things subside,

It's really awkward; and sounds like you were just jumbling words together to rhyme again.

Overall, as I said, this isn't exactly a complex; interesting piece of poetry. It sounds rather childish and undeveloped. However, you show promise. Remember to show, not tell. Work on that and your rhythm. Remember; it doesn't have to rhyme!

Good luck; and keep writing!

-Tori