The Conflict

The lines are drawn
Hatred presides over love
Like night over dawn
Now the mind starts playing games
And heart fights over the pain
Who are you?
I must have forgotten your name
Are you a foe? No maybe a long lost friend
It’s hard to recognize you,
You no longer remain the same
Maybe I should get ready,
It seems like, you are about to start to blame
I still the remember, when we were walking along
The path split in two
I went to the right, you went to the wrong
I shouted out to you, I shouted out your name
I tried to steer you away
But my efforts went out in vain
I’ prayed to god, I thought it was my mistake
I didn’t know you’ put everything you ever had all on stake
You hated me, coz’ what I said had tortured your conscience
And you knew it well, it was true
You may be too old before you realize it and rue
We were friends until then, you ask me a question
Were we friends..? Since when..?
You ended everything on a piece of doubt
I stood still and watched your mind cloud
People change, you did for worse with time
I felt helpless,
As I watched you commit another sin
And commit yet another crime
You pushed me around,
The guilt was fading away
Anger was the new emotion that I found
I had given up on you; I had given up way long
I fail to consider our friendship, coz’ those days are gone.
It’s difficult to control but this anger is slowly turning to rage
And I wonder if I should write down every bloody sin you’ve committed
On to a page
While we are standing here face-to-face
I warn you now, get ready to save your leftover grace
There’s still a choice, choose if you must before it’s too late
If you are confused, I’m willing to Waite
But if you still choose wrong over right
There’s going to be a conflict, there's going to be a battle
So brace yourself for a fight.

Pretty good. I think it might have been a bit more organized if you broke it into stanzas here and there but I did like it overall. The rhyming seems a bit forced here and there, and the flow doesn't always work.

I had given up on you; I had given up way long

I didn't really understand this part of the line. Way long? What? I'd suggest rephrasing it.

And I wonder if I should write down every bloody sin you’ve committed
On to a page

This part bothered me a bit. The rhyme works but it seems forced and the line is out of place; it's way too short in comparison to the rest of the poem.

Otherwise, no complaints, nothing much to say besides well down, I liked this. Keep writing.

thank you! well....i just have no idea how poetry works...to be honest i never knewi could write one either. the words just keep coming and i write but i'll remember.... thanks

"I still the remember,"
i think maybe it's "i still remember" anyway, it just stopped me. i love it, it's good.............:D
keep up

It was good. Maybe just try to break the sentances up a bit more, to make it easier to read.