High School Reflection

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inkwell
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Thu Apr 14, 2011 5:45 am
inkwell says... · Thu Apr 14, 2011 5:45 am
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DiannePan
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Thu Apr 14, 2011 2:58 pm
DiannePan says... · Thu Apr 14, 2011 2:58 pm
Haha! Goodness!
This grabbed my attention as I'm an editor for our HS newspaper. What you wrote is so true, it's a bit like an implicit truth about HS, no one [i]really[i] wants to acknowledge it.You succeeded as a writer to get a message across. I very much enjoyed reading this :). However, the ending threw me off a bit: " For a lack of better conclusion" perhaps you should sub a different word instead of *better*. As a writter/reporter/jornalist you should portray your superiority (sounds conceited I know, but thats how we writers roll)in a way with words so maybe something akin to this : "For a lack of pop cultural mindtripping conclusion and" the Latin classes part was excellent though.
But I don't know, maybe it's just me and my evil editor nit picking ;)
"I think--therefore I exist" ~ Rene Descartes.
I write--therefore I continue to pursue my most cherished dream.
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More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
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