I'll Choose To Believe

have you seen the trees behind the deserted mosque?
there's nothing wrong with the place, there's nothing in it
there's no one, there's no space in it
I'm just a spectator taking the whole scene in

I looked at the skies and couldn't see hope
then I looked at the earth, but I couldn't see the core
the co-incidence made me smile
at the ghost of footsteps as they trail away

thinking an unanswered call means a refusal
but God prefers silence when it comes to testing you
I prefer to watch him do what he likes
and then wonder if I'm wrong or if I'm right

sometimes it's not about where I go: Heaven or Hell
but the gratitude demanded out of a shivering slave
the thanks for the protection and the pain
the cry of child as they cut off the umbilical

the tune is insane I can't sing to it
so I let the heart beat
and when it catches up with the clock
I'll choose to believe

" co-incidence"
I'm pretty sure this doesn't need a hyphen.

"and then wonder if I'm wrong or if I'm right"
This line combined with the one above it looks like it's supposed to start or finish a rhyming pattern. It throws readers off when that happens, you should change it if it's not supposed to rhyme.

This was interesting. I think it jumps around with it's ideas too much, I couldn't see past the words at all. I was really confused by this. Maybe it's three years age difference, but I don't know. I didn't get this.

Hi, I am new to this society and I am certainly amazed by the diverse voices I see in the writers' pieces of work in this society.
Concerning this particular piece of work, I feel really sure that there is a voice. On the other hand, the voice in this piece of artwork seems all over the place and I couldn't quite get the main idea of the piece. Nevertheless, I love your poetic diction because it was quite self-explanatory. Keep it up!

Hi!
I love your poem,it is absolutely amazing! Keep on writing.

I feel that each stanza definetly stands out on it's own, and i had a hard time connecting the overall meaning. I did notice religious motifs in most of them, and maybe since i'm not religious i didn't get it. However, the imagery was wonderful, and your diction is magnificent. It had a wonderful cadence to it and it flowed like a river. Overall, i definetly like your poem, so keep on writing!