Do not click this.

I loved this poem =)

Of course, the title meant that I just HAD to click on it. Very entertaining =)
I should've seen that poem coming from the title. The best way to get everything done is by reverse psychology, including getting more views on your poem. Well done =)

well, you got my view and review... aren't you glad i clicked it now.


p.s i should be doing my homework since i've got soooooooo much of it, but instead i shall continue to read clever poems because they interest me.

curse the man who invented tetriary education.

Hello. Nice title XD.

a reason you clicked here, infact.

- I think you should also just capitalize the first letter, like most of the lines.
- Correction: 'in fact'

Afraid we will miss out,
If we follow the rules.

- I'm not sure if this is grammatically correct. >.<

Intead we seem childish

- Typo: 'Instead'
- Also, I think you should put a comma after 'Instead'.

and we look like such fools.

- Same here about the capitalization of the first letter.

different to the extreme.

- Same here.

satisfaction won't do any good.

- Same here.


This is an interesting poem. XD And you pretty much laid out what you wanted to say well. The substance though isn't that great since what the poem tells us is pretty obvious. It's just like a little thought you simply wanted to share. But this poem really can catch the reader's attention because you used that fact about humans to your advantage so good job. xD

Never stop writing.

Wow... this poem is so good! There are no grammar or spelling mistakes that I can see, and it flows really well. It's quite a strange and unexpected poem, but the title really draws the reader in and it is so good! congratulations on a truly superb poem, keep writing this well!
~strawberrypop13

I loved this poem. Normally when people refernece other sayings in poems; it bothers me because its not orignal. You, are an exception. You made it your own and explanded the meaning. Great job!

Wow, this was cool, hah! What a great way to title it, and what a great poem it was! I was expecting to see something ... different. Not something, almost, mocking us for clicking the title! I really like the first and last verses (if that's what you call them, hahah.)

Curiosity killed the cat.
Satisfaction brought it back.
There is a reason these words have been said,
a reason you clicked here, infact.

Curiosity killed the cat,
satisfaction won't do any good.
Get over your stupid defiance.
Go do something you should.

I like how you brought the beginning and ending together by the first lines, and contradicted the second line in the end with "satisfaction won't do any good" instead of "satisfaction brought it back". I think this was a really cool concept to your poem! Keep it up!

It's absolutely amazing how much attention this thread has gotten. Tell someone not to do something that they can't get in trouble for doing and they immediately do it. Wow.

Your friendly neighborhood Kafka.

Now. As nearly all of the reviews you have received thus far are things like:

I loved it. Don't change anything.

...I thought I might offer you some critique you might find a tad bit more useful. I can guarantee that this is going to be harsh, so if you are feeling temperamental at the moment, I deplore you to read on. There's my warning. So. Let's get started, shall we?

Clever? Perhaps for a fourth grader. Sorry to ruin your party, but poetic dexterity is much more than simply having a title that says not to click it. I'm guessing that this was the entire purpose of this poem, because, to put it bluntly, everything else - the feeling, the flow, the imagery - falls utterly flat. It is also clear that the title was the only thing you hoped would pull the poem forward because the entirety of the poem orbits around it, and does not dare attempt to sever the barrier, or to make some epiphanic revelation. You've tied yourself to the fence.

I think you were aiming for something of a deeper meaning, but the ceaseless contradictory statements cause this endeavor to crumble. For example, in the beginning, you imply that curiosity can be represented as a hazardous means to achieve understanding. In the second stanza, you give the reader the notion of a narrator either having lured the reader into a trap, or watching the reader attempt to navigate the precarious enterprise that is, apparently, curiosity. It is in the third and fourth stanzas, however, that the fallacies begin to appear. The contents of the former cause me to begin to view the narrator as some bemused deity, which further sways me into believing that said narrator is, in fact, an onlooker. "Twisted-up fears," I assume, relates to curiosity in that we are curious about the wrong subjects - subjects that we otherwise should be afraid of. Right there, one can perceive a discongruousness. This says that this whole thing was a trap. Following this logic, one can deduce that the narrator has a slightly cruel sense of humor. And there is one small, but important, issue that I noticed. All of the "we"'s you use while scolding the reader for his/her curiosity completely contradict the divine properties you established earlier.

Hope this helped in some way. And remember - I did warn you.

-Kafka

It didn't really live up to the title. I thought it would be something shocking. I wanted a WOW factor. but other than that. it was a pretty good. Keep Writing!!!

This is so cute! I love it. Though I did see something I thought I'd make not of, in this stanza:

Afraid we will miss out,
If we follow the rules.
Intead we seem childish
and we look like such fools.

I do believe you meant "Instead we seem childish"

That's the only error I saw. I loved the poem itself. Very clever, very clever indeed.

Great job,
Amber

I clicked. And I was entertained.

This is a great poem, and in just fiddling around on the guitar, this would make an excellent song. I especially loved how you brought back "curiosity killed the cat" in the last stanza. I thought it packaged everything up very neatly.

However, I'm really disappointed in your final stanza. Everything was going smoothly, and I was really getting into it, and it was very very good. But your last stanza is preachy. I loved the disappointment and frustration with the world throughout the whole poem, and then this happened:

Curiosity killed the cat,
satisfaction won't do any good.
Get over your stupid defiance.
Go do something you should.

To be quite honest, it's lame. If you turn this stanza into something less confrontational (and less blatant), and try to remove the "this is what you should get out of this poem" feel that is currently there, it'll be a much better work.

Keep it up,
kf

Hey
The name alone just thrilled me, the contents just blew me!! Humans are way to predictable... I say that like I'm some sort of alien lol. I enjoyed the way you expressed yourself it's as if i could here a voice scolding me for clicking this! The voice in my head kinda sounded like my mother. lol You deserve a real big round of applause for this brilliant poem... pity you cant hear me from here.
Just a little nit-picking. The rhyme scheme in the first stanza doesn't really flow, but this is just my opinion. maybe you could play around a little with words and you'll find something slightly more appropriate.
Other than that i have no problems, though some readers may not like your attitude towards them reading your work.lol
ToLy

wow i kinda loved this poem but kinda hated it....i loved it but i hated that you made the right assumption about me....it was nice and fit together lol....i can't stop laughin at this tho...nice work

Instead we seem childish

First off, I fell for it! Haha! I'm in class, so trying my best not to chuckle too loudly. x) Second, I must commend you for your use of words! For 13, you certainly have quite the vocabulary, I'm truly impressed! There was one little knit-pick that I must point out, nothing huge:

Go do something you should.

Instead of this, try "Go do as you should." It flows a bit better with the piece. But that's just my personal opinion; if you feel your poem is perfectly fine the way it is, then ignore me.

~Panda;;

I like how everyone was reeled in cleverly with the title. Great job!
It ran very smoothly, so it was nicely written. I liked it very much, and I have nothing to critique you about, because you don't need it for this poem