Night songstress

Oh, how happy I am
To witness another magical night
On the emerald green woods
Where the nightingale would sing
A lament on my ears
As I sat back and relax
With my back on a tree
To admire the song and fireflies
Dancing on my feet.

Some random poem. Again.

Still great poem Can't wait to read more keep up the good work. Good luck and Happy Writing!!!!!!!!
Soulkana<3

This is sweet. I like the simpleness of it, and how it just is. Sometimes I like a poem without deep, philosophical meaning to it, something that I can read and immediately understand and feel good about. That's what this poem is. It's peaceful, relaxing, and sweet. Keep writing!

Oh, how happy I am
To witness another magical night
On in the emerald green woods
Where the nightingale would sing
A lament on for/in my ears add a comma here.
As I sat sit back and relax
With my back on a tree
To admire the song and fireflies
Dancing at my feet. Lovely ending. Kudos.

Don't capitalize the beginning of every line, poetry is a lot like prose in it's punctuation. You just have more freedom in poetry, that's all.
You have a really nice ending here. It remind me of of A Midsummer Night's Dream, It really has a dreamy quality to it. The punctuation is really what you need to work on. The language could be more complex, also. Other than that, the ideas are all there, you just need a few touch ups.
Good luck and keep writing!
-KatTrain

Hey darkangel!

First off, I think I'll sound a bit harsh, but I'm only trying to help. My first impression of the poem was not a good one; I thought the combination of adjectives and description awfully cliché, like I expected those adjectives to those nouns. Maybe try to expand your vocabulary a bit? I know it's rather hard, but sometimes a more colourful use of words leads to a better poem.

I rather liked the idea, though, and the execution wasn't bad. There are two things wrong grammar wise, in my opinion. The capitalization of every first word on every line isn't needed, but there is something very important missing in this poem and that would be punctuation. I do think adding some would improve the poem.

However, considering the thought of the poem was rather interesting, I think it has a lot of potential.
Feel free to PM me if you have any questions and keep the good work!
- Kat

I like it! I was thrown off of what I thought I'd be reading by the title, though... I would highly recommend something like "Song of the Night" or something along those lines because you did not personify night in the poem, so the title becomes misleading. Love it!

This poem seemed very up-lifting, somehow. Very high-spirited, I guess. It's lacking comma's, and periods, but other than that, it's awesome.