Even I don't know what I am doing

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Weirdo. Pixie. Demon. Elf. Ella had been called all these things in her 12 years of life-even before she could understand her parents had been ridiculed for there strange daughter.
Ella was the middle child of 5 siblings, Megan, Alexa, Ryan and Gary. 4 perfectly normal children and one freak wasn't so bad her parents reasoned.
But then one day Ella died and everyone she knew died with her. 4 out of 5 is bad.
And that children is why you must never get less than a 85% on a test. BEWARE!

I need to work on writing short SHORT stories with a plot and climax.[/i]
Adults are just obsolete children, and to hell with them!
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Ok, this seems more like Randomness then actual story...the beginning is actually pretty good, you could make a story out of it. But when you said "Then Ella dies" I'm like, Ok what is THIS about...
***Honorary 11-Year-Old***

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this is good.
i actually had a sister called ella who died, so when i read this it reminded me of her.
but yeah, this is good, it was the name that got my attention.
this has potential for a story but as hekategirl says it does sound like pure randomness.
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Thats my problem; i never seem able to end a story properly with the begining climax and end. I always get long winding storys that i get bored of before the end.
Adults are just obsolete children, and to hell with them!
-Dr.Suess

Deadpanners are backtalkers!

badonkadonk
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We're all stories in the end.
— 11th Doctor