to fill a space

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So, this poem is trying not to be emo but I'm not sure it's managing very well..? Also, I'm not sure about all the switching from 1st person to 2nd etc. Is it messy? And I suck at thinking of titles, so any suggestions are much appreciated.

one day I'll look back at the little hurts,
the invisible papercut scars, and laugh ruefully
then smile because I am grown and found
anchored, secure and strong
and hindsight must be earned

but how do you expand to fill a space
so large you can't feel its edges?
like the swathe of sky that stretches overhead
winking with tiny ancient eyes
you might as well be invincible
reach out and taste the light
with your chameleon tongue

but you're not the lizard, nor the bird
more's the pity
what if you're the mouse in the field
whiskers trembling heart juddering

and how do you cross a bridge
when you haven't built the foundations
and the planks are shaky
and the decades yawn beneath you
when you don't know the destination

I remember a girl
whose hair brushed her mother's waist
who knew that she was exactly in the middle
just right
I remember a girl, told,
"you're not grown, more... stretched"
(like a badly cropped photo
or a rubber band)
who grimaced in recognition

I know a girl
who cannot pin her thumb down on an ache
who smiles, because
she does not know the last line.

It's a really cool poem. I feel bad saying this, but I feel like the poem jumped around a lot and didn't really stay on topic. I think it would have been better if you had smoother transitions between the different scenarios.

I loved this. The rhythm was really nice - it flowed well and your use of imagery was beautiful. The first stanza seemed very hopeful:

one day I'll look back at the little hurts,
the invisible papercut scars, and laugh ruefully
then smile because I am grown and found
anchored, secure and strong
and hindsight must be earned

When you said 'chameleon' I accidentally read it as 'charmander.' Whoops!
Keep writing!
-Dai

Hi there.

The rhythm in this is very good and solid, as is the flow. It all works quite nicly and fits together.

I think your switched between first and second person were pretty clean and clear.

However I think your punctuation needs a little work. You have no capital letters or full stops all the way through.

Besides that, very good.

Let me start off by saying that there was something about this that I just couldn't help liking. It had an unusual flow, but it worked pretty well. I don't think the switch from first to second person was messy at all - it seems to be fairly clear.
I also really liked the way you worded the fourth stanza. It was powerful and incredibly beautiful.
The only thing that I think could be improved on was your use of punctuation. A more consistent useage throughout the poem would go a long way.
Overall, this was a very moving poem, and I quite enjoyed it. Oh, and, I think the title fits this poem very well.
~Alz