Unpredictable.

Lurking
am I,
in the dark of my own shadow.

Try and find me.
I dare you to open up those
sewn closed lashes.

Smiling,
my mouth
seems to be happier than my eyes.

I should be an actress
because it's not like you see
through this mask.

Look.
"Hi, my name is Molly, and I'm not so happy afterall."

Hello, nice meeting you here. Seriously I had no idea you wrote this. I loved it, really. Good job on writing this. I like this because the message in it is what I always try to tell people. Or the world, really.

Hmmm. Very interesting *Strokes chin-beardy thingy*. I like the actual poem, I can say that upfront, but the formating is weird. It is obvious that the formating is different for a reason, but Im not sure if it gave your poem the extra 'umph'. Good job on the poem, but maybe be a little less risky with formating.

I would take out the first comma--read it out loud. You wouldn't normally pause ther, so I don't think you need it in this poem.

I don't think anything's wrong with the formatting--is this why your next poem was all together, instead of separated into stanzas?

All in all, I think this is a beautiful poem (though sewn closed body parts always make me cringe.)

*Tries not to seem like I'm stalking your profile*

I love how short and simple this is. It voices the unvocalized heartaches of so many in so few words.

Bravo once again!

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We don't stalk, we follow! ^_^ (Muahahahaha)