One and One Make Two.

Out of the corner of my eye,
I see you.
In the depths of my heart,
I need you.
Off the tip of my tongue,
I don't know what to say.
Its hard to talk to you,
But I can't stay away (Period here.)

Your voice is smooth as ice,
as you whisper my name.
My pain and suffering won't suffice!
Your new torture game!
Throwing salt in my wounds!
Ignoring our old past!
I don't know what to do!
But love dries up fast.

Out of the corner of my eye,
I see you.
In the depths of my heart,
I need you.
Off the tip of my tongue,
I don't know what to say.
Its hard to talk to you,
But I can't stay away.

Your voice is smooth as ice,
as you whisper my name.
My pain and suffering won't suffice!
Your new torture game!Throwing salt in my wounds!
Ignoring our old past!
I don't know what to do!
But love dries up fast.
Ill try not to cry,
as it will make you too.

I'll try to be strong,
because I still love you.
All the pain I've felt,
It's just something you do.
For you, I melt.
But, one and one make two.

Out of the corner of my eye,
I see you.
In the depths of my heart,
I need you.
Off the tip of my tongue,
I don't know what to say.
Its hard to talk to you, --it should be it's
But I can't stay away.

Your voice is smooth as ice, --love this part
as you whisper my name.
My pain and suffering won't suffice! --good rhyming pattern
Your new torture game!
Throwing salt in my wounds!
Ignoring our old past! --I'd find another adjective here for "past"
I don't know what to do!
But love dries up fast.
Ill try not to cry, I'll, you forgot an <<'>>
as it will make you too.

I'll try to be strong,
because I still love you.
All the pain I've felt,
It's just something you do. --these lines in italics felt a little weak, compared to the rest of the poem.
For you, I melt.
But, one and one make two. --but the ending is perfect. I love how you ended your poem

Out of the corner of my eye,
I see you.
In the depths of my heart, From the depths of my heart,
I need you.
Off the tip of my tongue,
I don't know what to say.
Its hard to talk to you, It's hard to talk to you,
But I can't stay away.

[Your voice is smooth as ice,
as you whisper my name.
My pain and suffering won't suffice!
Your new torture game!
Throwing salt in my wounds! Throwing salt on my wounds.
Ignoring our old past! Past is always old. So, old past used together does not sound good. Reword
I don't know what to do!
But love dries up fast.] Good use of imagery in this stanza. I liked it. But the excessive use of exclamation marks is not necessary. It looks a bit odd with a lot of them.

Ill try not to cry, I'll try to cry,
as it will make you too. Doesn't sound good. Reword.
I'll try to be strong,
because I still love you.
All the pain I've felt,
It's just something you do. Leave out the just part.
For you, I melt.
But, one and one make two.

Out of the corner of my eye,
I see you.
In the depths of my heart,
I need you.
Off the tip of my tongue,
I don't know what to say.
Its hard to talk to you,
But I just can't stay away. I really like the flow and the words. I think the flow could be improved by adding the just in there.

Your voice is smooth as ice,
as you whisper my name.
My pain and suffering won't suffice! Get rid of the exclamation marks. They are not needed, and exclamation marks actually make it seem juvenile. Periods actually do a far better job placing emphasis than exclamation marks.
Your new torture game!
Throwing salt in my wounds!
Ignoring our old past!
I don't know what to do!
But love dries up fast. Again I like the flow.

Ill try not to cry,
as it will make you too.
I'll try to be strong,
because I still love you.
All the pain I've felt,
It's just something you do.
For you, I melt.
But, one and one make two. Again, love it.