The Darkest Light

Hate


Hate is a terrible feeling

Hate is a strong word


Hate is a terrible sight to behold


See it everywhere I go
Feel It for the people I thought love me the most

Use it for the lies and betrayles
Stuck Between good and evil
and there I am
Right between it all
Is where I stand

Which side should I take?
Left or Right?
My heart pound to make the right choice
But there isnt a right choice

There only Hate
What the world is mostly made of

So my heart cosume it all
From the past to the present

And what will that leave me?
Whats left when you consume all the hate in the world?

Theres only one thing you become
An Avenger

Hey, here's a quick review.

Hate is a terriable feeling

Hate is a terriable sight to behold

Spelling error. Terrible.

Feel It for the people I thought love me the most

No need to capitalise 'i' for 'it'.

Use it for the lies and betrayals
Stuck between good and evil,
and there I am.
Right between it all
Is where I stand.

My heart pound to make the right choice
But there isnt a right choice

My heart pounds to make the right choice,
but there isn't one.
There's no need to repeat 'right choice'.

There only Hate
What the world is mostly made of

So my heart cosume it all
From the past to the present

And what will that leave me?
Whats left when you consume all the hate in the world?

Theres only one thing you become
An Avenger

Don't forget your apostraphes. And spelling.

There's only Hate
So my heart consumes it all
What's left when you consume all the hate in the world?
There's only one thing you become

I'd suggest ending your poem with a period.
'An Avenger.'
It'll give it more impact.

Be careful with your spelling. And remember to use apostraphes when necessary. For eg. It is= It's. There is= There's. Be careful not to capitalise letters unnecessarily.

I didn't really understand the whole poem though.

Feel It for the people I thought love me the most

Why would you feel hate for those who love you?

Stuck Between good and evil

Which side should I take?
Left or Right?

Are you torn between choosing whether or not to hate someone?

With some polishing up, this poem would be really good. Keep writing!

Thanks for the review I will look at all the mistakes and edit it.

What a true poem. Though there were some spelling errors, i liked it very much. Many people feel that way, but i haven't heardanyone express it that well in words. Nice overall idea of teenage essence.

Thank for your review. Im not really that good with writing poems but when its about my feelings words just spill out and I have to hurry up and write it down before I forget it ;D

Giselle97 wrote: Hate

Which side should I take?
Left or Right?
My heart pound to make the right choice
But there isnt a right choice

There only Hate
What the world is mostly made of

This quote is so true. There's so much hate in the world that some people feel it's the only option. We need more Love in this world, which is why I chose my signature (below). This poem is like the cry of the coming generation. I think your words would open a lot of people's eyes. It would show them the impact hate is having on the youth.

~sniff, sniff~ thank you so much. You really made me day ;D