Human's Treasure

I woke up this morning and thought to come down to earth to see,
If humans could have changed much, so come and check with me

Inside every human, in a place that can't be reached,
By ignorance, there's a force waiting to be unleashed

For every man, every woman, every child they all
Know in their hearts of hearts that somehow they must meet their goal.

But it must be said to those who wrongly read between the lines,
No one lives forever, only One can be called Devine.

You may say," I don't have to try, I'm not even wise!"
But the truth is there for those who seek it, those who open their eyes.

Beware; Be cautious; Be careful; Because this is just the beginning,
You might fall and loose it all if you were too sure of winning

Only those who can speak the Language of the World,
Will understand the meaning of what this treasure can hold.

Let humans' mind wander to what they think fits the best,
Money? Diamonds, wealth? Think of all that and leave the rest

But what matters the most is what they forget,
They choose what can be stolen by a person they've just met *

Oh, how typical of humans to believe that money can make them rise
I think I'll go to sleep now. By the way, I prefer being wise.

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You know, I wrote this poem a little while ago.
** The line that says " They choose what can be stolen by a person they've just met" is actually inspired by something that happened to me- also a little while ago.
Hope you enjoyed reading it, and I'd love to hear your opinion on it, because I realize that there are some flaws in it.
Thanks!

I like this, really I think that you should enter this in a contest one day. I love these lines:

Let humans' mind wander to what they think fits the best,
Money? Diamonds, wealth? Think of all that and leave the rest

But what matters the most is what they forget,
They choose what can be stolen by a person they've just met *

very good, by the way, very very good.

Thanks, Lele253isme!
Glad you liked it!

I absolutely loved it! It is really interesting and gets you thinking, good job!

-Liz

Now this is a real thinker.. Love the poem, love the message!
Good Job.
Im pretty new to this stuff. I think that some of your lines could be said in less words, just to aid with the flow .
For example
"But it must be said to those who wrongly read between the lines,
No one lives forever, only One can be called Devine."
The top line could be shortened to "take head, you who (misinterpret?) wrongly read between the lines."
Like I said, Im new, so that means inexperienced.
Well Done

Thanks, both of you!