My Stupid Teenage Essence

Wow. Sums up teenage life perfectly!
The flow of it really manages to keep a person intrigued the whole way through. (:

I think this is my favorite so far! It's really good! I think the- "Lacking in smart words" is what made it so melancholic. It's really a beautiful poem, so much truth to it! It describes the teenage essence perfectly- how we kinda create a wall around ourselves and hide our insecurities, and just try to figure out who we are. Very nice.

I really liked you poem but I did notice one small thing wrong with it.

With one swift motion, cold words have made me shatter,
I've been told I wasn't good enough, which makes me work even harder.

It doesn't really flow with the rest of the poem, and it also doesn't rhyme like all of the other stanzas. Other than that, I really liked it.

Oh
My
God
You did such an amazing job with this peice.
I adored your analogies and especially the ending!
I agree with you on everything and loved reading it! You are so creative with your writing and have a beautiful way of expressing yourself. The title drew me in from the start and I am just baffled by the truth behind your words.
Thank you so much for posting it and I hope to see more breathtaking peices like this from you soon!

I don't really like rhyming all that much, but this was actually pretty good. I can deffinitely relate to this easily. Great job and good luck on future writes.