Never see Me drop

You never succeeded and you never will
You didn't even try
You just keep stumbling over your own feet
You can't even do one thing right
What is wrong with you?

You let my mums tears drop
You didn't even try to catch them
Your a failure to the world
You aint nothing but a stone
You didn't even try to gain
the love and happiness for her.

Why the hell are you still here?
I don't give a damn no more
I never want to be like you
I've raised my goals now
and I will succeed

I will succeed and fly high up into the sky
and i will be looking down on you
You'll never see me drop
to your levels
Your levels aren't even in my standards

Watch me fly sky high and never
come back down
I will give her all the happiness
that you couldn't give
my mums my life so don't mess about
with her cause you will never get past me
You'll be under my curse i will
make you stumble across your own feet
yet your already good at that

Hey Shailz, T here. I was very confused by your poem. It didn't make much sense to me. Are you yelling at yourself or some one else? And I have a couple nitpicks, everything in red is the corrections:

You let my mum's tears drop

Just a simple typo

You aren't nothing but a stone

As my mother has always told me, aint aint a word.

my mum's my life so don't mess about

Another simple typo

with her because you will never get past me

You either write 'cause or because

You'll be under my curse I will

Capitalization.

Other then that I felt that the poem wasn't broken up properly. Each line didn't have the right feeling.
It was like you started
saying something and
then you broke
it off right
Where it would
be acceptable.
You see?

It just gives your poem a choppy feeling and confuses the reader. This piece of writing does have potential but it was hard to see it through some of the typos and such. I hope you'll take some of my advice into consideration. Now I'm mad because I sound like such a Debbie Downer-sorry about that. Keep writing!
-T

It was kind of all over the place. Looks like you were quite emotional at the time - Maybe take it easy next time and go in proper sequence? It was good, but there was not much flow or rhythm. Try not to be as abrupt next time.

It was kind of all over the place. Looks like you were quite emotional at the time - Maybe take it easy next time and go in proper sequence? It was good, but there was not much flow or rhythm. Try not to be as abrupt next time.

I didn't really enjoy this poem. Maybe if it made sense or if you explained it to me I would understand. It seems like your upset or angry. My take on this is that you are mad at somebody for putting you down? I really am confused by this.